double dare

[hallaig]

not my best, but a favourite



Surprise Attacks



I hear the sound of a boy
waiting to be ambushed
by his father,
that carpet of smells and roars
like a bear, all hugs and stubble.
Each step breaks on the stairs like ice
and it precedes him, this excitement,
like a shadow mad and off its moorings.
Oh should we not weep
for the ghosts of undiluted joy
and the years I cannot wish for him
but he is eager, all fists for.

It is a long minute.
He is stopped, poised on one leg
like a crane.
Perhaps he will be a dancer
or a poet
it doesn't matter.
Whether he requires it for his art or not
he will be ambushed by his father,
from the tips of pencils
the precipitation of sleep
he will be ambushed by his father,
when he is old and threadbare
and sick of such surprises,
even then
he will be ambushed by his father.

[hillwalker]

Great portrayal of how we are shaped by whom we come from, and how we are never allowed to forget it.

H

[Hawkman]

It is an arresting poem and the second stanza is a killer.

Live and be well - H

[Bar22do]

It's a great poem, hall, and ah - overwhelming. Long live your typing fingers...

[Delta40]

I love it! Can even imagine the pattern on the carpet!

[Jerrybaldy]

Thanks for joining in Hallaig.
A great choice, a telling tale of heritage and the use of 'ambushed' captures it well.

[Sameer Telkar]

I think there is tie between you, hawkman and hillwalker when it comes to the best double dare Thursday poem.Others were great too.

[Xillus_Xavier]

Very interesting piece. Liked how you drew me in as a reader. The ending was delivered very well.

[Haunted]

Interesting indeed. How you approach the subject, it's very fresh and enjoyable.