double dare thursday - here is mine

[Jerrybaldy]

Inevitable




Join Date: May 2010
Location: Bristol, UK
Posts: 2,619 wet sand

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I am digging for the wet sand
To build a castle
In pain with the grains beneath my nails
Ice cream stains on my vest
Unbroken heart held
In my pigeon chest
The sea is calling me
Jerry
I run toes stubbing rocks
Frightening fish
The bed falls away
And there’s mum
There’s dad
Waving
Hello mum
Hello dad
You are like them both
But further away
I can see the cliffs
I can see the sky
More and more blue
Between me and you
Soon a dolphin will take me back
I will hold on to its fin
That castle will not build itself
You look like you belong there
Together waving at me
I have drifted past the piers end
You should be proud
I am my own man
Your shouts are drowned
By seagulls cries
I dive to the depths
In Scooby doo trunks
Where sunlight cannot reach
To find wet sand to build a castle
Grasped in my small hand
I rise like a hopeful bubble
And burst into open ocean air
Seagulls lend me wings
To cumulinimbus
Here in the sky
My trunks dripping water
Back to the seas
I suck on an icecream
And wave goodbye.

[Hawkman]

Hey, JB, you nearly got overlooked in your Scheme... Bad form! This is a good one for sure, but it's not my favourite of yours ;)

Live and be well - H

[Delta40]

I love most of your poetry and it doesn't have a vagina in it which makes it an extra treat. Fantastic childhood snapshot Jerry and a favourite of mine.

[hillwalker]

Hey, JB, you nearly got overlooked in your Scheme... Bad form!

Isn't it ironic!

A great trip down memory lane without the grim reaper selling choc ices for once.

H

[Jerrybaldy]

Thank you Hawk, Hill and Delta.

Its all a bit fanciful maybe, but I enjoyed writing and re-reading this one.

[Bar22do]

A heart warming dive into childhood when reality and fantasy, birds and men, water and clouds... are all reality and, more importantly, just candid freedom! Enjoyed a lot (have not read it before, I'm afraid, so thanks for posting this one, especially if it is one you had a special pleasure writing!)

[Haunted]

So this is your signature piece, Jerry Inevitable?

It's really vivid, "Ice cream stains on my vest" brought back memories for me too. Not much fun like yours, it was egg yolk on a wool school uniform and I was in tears.

I wonder about waving goodbye... but I won't overanalyze it and get all upset over that ;)