season change

[Delta40]

stinking drain
running into the gully
rats
the lot of you
dank murky lives
submerged in filthy lies
what's for dinner then?
Another headline
another handjob
while the gravy sticks
to the bottom
I never could get those lumps out
and that rusty brillo
won't scrub it clean
stinking drain
spring rain
you still don't smell
any better

[Jerrybaldy]

That is the very epitome of Deltaesque ! :D Are you impersonating yourself? :D

Loved it. Despite its gritty and downbeat tone it made me smile.

[hallaig]

pleasantly and unremittingly bleak. Like it.

[Bar22do]

Delta, ah. It gets worse and worse, but your writing better and better. Bleak, relentlessly.

[MystyrMystyry]

Sticky.


Reads of the N being trapped somewhere they really don't want to be, doing what they really don't want to be doing, like a captive slave to a tyrant.


Sticky.

[Haunted]

Bitter. What changed? (Besides season?)

[Delta40]

Bitter. What changed? (Besides season?)

Honestly? I really don't like to reveal the sources of my inspiration lest you all have a good laugh at me....:p

[Haunted]

Not to worry, my question is just rhetorical ;)

Despite the source, your rich metaphors in depicting the feeling win the day.

[Hawkman]

A fairly billious offering, this, but it would benefit from a seasoning of punctuation. Either that or don't use any. It does trip along rather nicely, though in a jaundiced way :D

Live and be well - H