The Sea

[Jerrybaldy]

The sea creates a saline illusion
of eternity
for me.
Behind that rock,
I wish that I saw, the sea drenched hair
of a siren awaiting me.
In the incoming swell,
I wish I’d swim out
a fight with the tide,
to flee.
A dolphin nudges
a favoured one,
the way they set the crippled free.
Will you wait for me?
I will be better the week after next,
send me a text,
we can laugh out loud,
but I am in the sea,
beyond the buoys that show
where the pedalos are allowed to go.
I can hear my breath,
I don’t want to come right now.
I want to hear the band in the royal hotel,
slow jazz escaping coloured glass,
a bay of sea away.
The scent of the depth
still stinks of months ago,
of blind fish and coconut cream,
Hawaiian shirts, nobodies,
false f ucks and dominoes.
This is a poem.
The blackness of the sea
that surrounds me,
rhymes quite well,
with our latent lust, to be free.
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[Jack of Hearts]

... wuss.







J

[Jack of Hearts]

This reader is rubber, you are glue.






J

[Jerrybaldy]

Soz Jack, could you be a bit more incomprehendible there?:lol:

[Jack of Hearts]

Do they not have this in England?

"I am rubber, you are glue
whatever you say bounces off me
and sticks to you!"







J

[Jerrybaldy]

No we don't. Or it has passed me by. Anyways I have now re-posted it so .... your turn.

[Jack of Hearts]

Fine. For now.

But your poem's last few lines seem especially poignant right now:


This is a poem.
The blackness of the sea
that surrounds me,
rhymes quite well,
with our latent lust to be free.

JB, your voice is so developed. Your narrators are broken, gritty men caught up in their dirty worlds.

Will you say why you took this down in the first place?







J

[Jerrybaldy]

because i felt it was just too ****ty, too.

[Jack of Hearts]

Ugh, need to go bye from Litnet for a while. Need to not do this for a while. Bye bye.

Good luck JB. You're fine. You're alright.






J

[Haunted]

I want to hear the band in the royal hotel,
slow jazz escaping coloured glass,
a bay of sea away.

Something so 1948 about this, I really love....

Very Jerryish through and through. A nice nasty ending too.

[DocHeart]

Exquisitely immersive. Tremendous last four lines.

[MystyrMystyry]

Some good, even great, lines and images in this. Ever the swirling sea - a strong recurring theme of yours. Do you live near the coast JB?

[Delta40]

I like your fixation with the ocean Jerry. They're always a great place to lose oneself.

[Jerrybaldy]

Thank you Haunted, DocHeart, MM and Delta.

I dont live by the sea MM, but I plan to one day.

I guess it is bit of a fixation Delta. Old railway stations and the coast are two places I love to be.... I must come up with a station poem soon ... :D