Boring.

[zoolane]

Slip the cold breeze as drive through the air, as my hair dwindle itself as dances from my head.
The world in my sense is wicked one at best, the drained on the reality is people morbid sense of self-worth.
Everyone thinks own them something, when it my days you work hard and have respect for you and other.

I am slightly gone on wine but hey everyone need to relax. And why not me? The world is full of people with addiction problem. Hell I had more than fair shared but it learnt come through it and realize their problem.

[cafolini]

Slip the cold breeze as drive through the air, as my hair dwindle itself as dances from my head.
The world in my sense is wicked one at best, the drained on the reality is people morbid sense of self-worth.
Everyone thinks own them something, when it my days you work hard and have respect for you and other.

I am slightly gone on wine but hey everyone need to relax. And why not me? The world is full of people with addiction problem. Hell I had more than fair shared but it learnt come through it and realize their problem.

Glad to see you again. Congratulations on you English exam.

[zoolane]

Thank you Cafolini, I hope back college in Sept.

[MystyrMystyry]

The first time I read it I misread the first sentence. I thought the narrator was driving with the wind in their hair, and it was dwindling because of aging through having wasted too many years in company who weren't worth having. So deciding to get in the car drove away as fast and far as they could.

Then as the camera pulls back we see them drinking and it was all happening in their drunk daydream...


Probably a bit extreme as when I read it back the daydream wasn't quite so dramatic, but still fuel for my fantasy

[hillwalker]

Probably the least appropriate title for a piece yet...

This was an intriguing read. I guess you thought it was just something that came out of nothing but it has a poetic quality that's probably accidental.

Love the line 'I am slightly gone on wine'.
If that's what made you write something as compelling as this then make sure you get another bottle.

And well done on your exam results. Way to go.

H

[williamholt]

very nice post.i accept this opinion

[Volya]

I would assume it's only me who feels this way judging by other posts, but I always fail to see the poetic quality of your writing. You seem to deliberately miss out words and muck about the tenses and grammar of the piece...
I'm assuming it's deliberate, but I for one, can't see it as poetry.

[zoolane]

I would assume it's only me who feels this way judging by other posts, but I always fail to see the poetic quality of your writing. You seem to deliberately miss out words and muck about the tenses and grammar of the piece...
I'm assuming it's deliberate, but I for one, can't see it as poetry.

Hi,
If you look at bottom of post, you will see that I have characterizes of Dyslexia and you obvious do not know me or my ability of writing so please do not judge by writing ability because I certain would not judge you by your skill or lack of it.

[zoolane]

very nice post.i accept this opinion

Thank you William.

[Volya]

Hi,
If you look at bottom of post, you will see that I have characterizes of Dyslexia and you obvious do not know me or my ability of writing so please do not judge by writing ability because I certain would not judge you by your skill or lack of it.

I'm not judging you, I'm judging the poem. And just because you have dyslexia doesn't mean anyone should be any more lenient when judging your writing. And I do know your ability of writing, as I have seen other poems written by you.

[zoolane]

I'm not judging you, I'm judging the poem. And just because you have dyslexia doesn't mean anyone should be any more lenient when judging your writing. And I do know your ability of writing, as I have seen other poems written by you.

1, This not poem of any kind, these words that I put together as short piece. (Thoughts from when I was boring).

2. If was a poem I would in the poetry section.

And just point out you were judge me because you and I quote "You seem to deliberately miss out words and muck about the tenses and grammar of the piece...
I'm assuming it's deliberate"

but they are my faults of my characterizes of Dyslexia. Which do not expect any anyone to give me a free pass on this site.

[Volya]

1, This not poem of any kind, these words that I put together as short piece. (Thoughts from when I was boring).

2. If was a poem I would in the poetry section.

And just point out you were judge me because you and I quote "You seem to deliberately miss out words and muck about the tenses and grammar of the piece...
I'm assuming it's deliberate"

but they are my faults of my characterizes of Dyslexia. Which do not expect any anyone to give me a free pass on this site.

Sorry about the poetry mistake, I didn't realize it was in the writing section. Either way, I feel my point still stands.

[Delta40]

I've always enjoyed opening my mind to your writing Zoo. Although some works have been more challenging than others, it's worth pursuing since you often convey a message for us to think about and I like the word play you introduce.

I liked:

Hell I had more than fair shared

You had more than your fair share and as a mother you have more than fair shared. To me, that is very clever and is not something just anyone can write. Make the most of your unique gift Zoo.

[MANICHAEAN]

You have my backing Zoo. There is a way with words that you use that is unique.
Best regards
M.

[zoolane]

Sorry about the poetry mistake, I didn't realize it was in the writing section. Either way, I feel my point still stands.

What is your point?

At I can not writing with rules of English language or understand the use of grammar and I can not string a sentence together?

I know I can not do all above but why should that stop me from doing away or try to.

Thank you to Delta and Man much appreciation.

[hillwalker]

Zoo,

You manage to communicate your feelings and emotions as well as anyone on here.

'I am slightly gone on wine' probably sums up your state of mind when you wrote this as succinctly as anything the rest of us could come up with.

H

[Volya]

What is your point?

At I can not writing with rules of English language or understand the use of grammar and I can not string a sentence together?

I know I can not do all above but why should that stop me from doing away or try to.

Thank you to Delta and Man much appreciation.

Dude, I'm not saying you shouldn't write and stuff. All I was saying was I thought it wasn't that good.

[Delta40]

Dude, I'm not saying you shouldn't write and stuff. All I was saying was I thought it wasn't that good.

So it's preference rather than an appreciation of her unique skill? Well why didn't you just say so little 15 year old who doesn't want anyone to be mean to them...:p

[zoolane]

Dude, I'm not saying you shouldn't write and stuff. All I was saying was I thought it wasn't that good.

The things is that everyone is different with style, manner of language or way they writing on here. Also that you find authors from past like 'Edgar Allen Poe, William Faulkner and most recent Virginian Woof'. Writing manner which you would obvious not agree with. But I suggest you try reading them for you judge or assuming that they writing is bad.

[Volya]

So it's preference rather than an appreciation of her unique skill? Well why didn't you just say so little 15 year old who doesn't want anyone to be mean to them...:p

I wasn't being mean... D:
And zoolane: I've read some poems by Poe and Faulkner, and as it happens I do like them (although I haven't read any novels by them yet). I'm not sure why you'd assume I dislike their writing style...
And evidently the majority of people do think your work is good, so I'll assume it is. But that doesn't mean I personally have to like it.

[zoolane]

My writing might not be to your taste or other people, but I think the point is you did judge me on my ability of language use and grammar. People with dyslexia do not use the language you would expect from person with out dyslexia.

And also less you understand how much I have learn from this site also from when I starting with writing the difference between from then to now.

[Volya]

My writing might not be to your taste or other people, but I think the point is you did judge me on my ability of language use and grammar. People with dyslexia do not use the language you would expect from person with out dyslexia.

And also less you understand how much I have learn from this site also from when I starting with writing the difference between from then to now.

For the second time, I'm wasn't judging you as a person, I was judging the piece. And yes, I judged it on your ability of language use and grammar, because that is what writing is about. Why do you feel the need to keep pointing out you have dyslexia, it doesn't change my opinion of your writing.

[zoolane]

Again you think I am used my learn disabity as excuse for the way I writing and I am not.

To me is good thing because then my writing would similar to others which I would not want to be. It not because I have something against them either.

I will went get back I will view some your writing not as 15 years but as adult.

[Volya]

Again you think I am used my learn disabity as excuse for the way I writing and I am not.

To me is good thing because then my writing would similar to others which I would not want to be. It not because I have something against them either.

I will went get back I will view some your writing not as 15 years but as adult.

I didn't say you were using it as an excuse, I just said you keep bringing it up.
And good, I don't expect people to treat my work as though it were any different to that of an adults.

PS
If its any consolation, I liked your poem 'The Grotesque Fairy Tale'

[xtianfriborg13]

That's a nice writing of yours! Thanks for sharing!