I Could Not Sleep.

[zoolane]

Crumble on the brick from wall in the room, let slip brilliant light out, and hand reach out to me. In darkest room which sit in and yet other a lot brick dust fell at my feet. The hand is feel it way in the light as does pushed more of my wall down.

My eyes are arch as tight as rubber band, burn with pain as shred of glass piece in my eye and force close. Dry is my mouth and drip of water seem fell from above, my wall paper is at my feet with red roses glint in light.

I began cry of no apparent reason at all, but my body go to side and tried lean the wall that use to be here. As my body tried re gain up right position. the hands pull down and cover up with bricks and ...........

[MystyrMystyry]

Zoolane's back! My heart missed a beat just then Zoo.

This is great (in the way that a claustrophobic nightmare can be great ;) ), and I especially like the fact it's written in your unique style

I can't tell you how much I've missed the Zoolane style, forever forging new directions for the language, and inspiring hacks like me ;)

In this piece there are a couple of words that might be considered out of place, but as ever with your nightmarish scenarios, they make it rather than break it, putting the reader right in the middle of the action.

Please promise me you'll stick around longer this time, and post more! :)

[MANICHAEAN]

Zoo
Welcome back. I endorse everything MM said regards your unique style. Loved it.
Best regards
M.

[hillwalker]

This reads like being buried alive - nightmarish, and the rather jerky style makes it all the more convincing.

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[zoolane]

Thank you all, I honesty could not sleep night.

[Delta40]

Hi Zoo. Good to see you're back with that style of writing that is so uniquely you. I so enjoy the effect you achieve through your tumble of words and just like Hill said I was plunged right into the nightmarish thoughts of being buried alive. Keep posting x

[Steven Hunley]

Zoolane,

I saw your name this morning but was in transit. Now I'm home and just read your piece. So very evocative are your words. You're images are etched on my brain as usual. Welcome back. As you can see----you were missed.

[Jack of Hearts]

'Nightmarish' is exactly the right word. Agree with hill, welcome back Zoo.






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[zoolane]

Thank you again all. I will trying and come up with original pieces for you.

[prendrelemick]

Welcome back friend. I've missed reading your stuff.

[aliengirl]

I'm glad you're back Zoolane. :) Missed your dark writings very much.

[zoolane]

Thank you Prendrel and Aliengirl.