Prose...Poetry...Poetic Prose...

[Jeos]

Prose…
Poetry…
Poetic prose…
Nonsense.

I write
As a newborn cries
As a newly opened
Wound bleeds.
But I write. I write

Not to die from this death
That kills us all every day
A little more…
I write to die-to die
of another death!

Prose?
Poetry?
Poetic prose?
Nonsense!

[Bar22do]

Jeos - it serves a purpose, then. Therefore it isn't nonsense, is it. But what kind of death do you expect to die from? Your verse here reads to me more as a cry for fulfilment in life...

My two pence (for what they're worth):

Prose, poetry, poetic prose…
I write,
like a newborn cries,
a fresh wound bleeds.

I write,
not to die from a death
that kills slowly every day,
but from another -

prose, poetry, poetic prose…
tell me!

[Jeos]

Ah ! My friend...of course it serves a purpose ! when I "say" poetry, prose etc, I am referring to the academic dispute around gender (such a thing still exists believe me...)

'a cry for fulfilment in life...': you just have to add the word "spiritual" between 'for' and 'fulfilment'and you will be absolutely right...as I do not believe in any other kind of fulfilment and I am a very picky one...;-) - I hope this last comment will clarify your question on 'death.' too...

Next week it will be my vacations turn - at the isle of Madeira...I hope that the dantesque landscape will inspire me!

[Bar22do]

Of course, "spiritual" was implied, for life IS. Specifying would have sounded as if I don't trust it.

Get the best of your well deserved rest in Madeira (dream island, I even wrote about in my "Julio"!).

[Hawkman]

As a work of satire this has the halmark of genius. If you are possibly referring to the recent furore around an appointment at a prestigeous British university where an academic, female in this case, was prepared to stab a male colleague in the back in order to secure the position, then the references to death and gender politics in academia would make quite a lot of sense.

I'm not entirely convinced that this was your intention though. It's a little florrid in style for my taste and might benefit from some judicious pruning. A little less 'flouncing,' perhaps...

Live and be well - H

[Jeos]

Hawkman what do you mean exactly by 'flouncing'? For in portuguese that gives something like "crazily kicking" :-) ...
To get now & then the comments that counts from people that counts it's all that I need.
Thanks for the other "tubes" too.

[Hawkman]

I'm not quite sure how to explain flouncing... Not so much crazily kicking, more sort of melodramatic with a touch of high camp, I think is about as close as I can get to it. A bit theatrically exaggerated. Sorry, you lost me with the "tubes" thing, but you're welcome anyway :D

Live and be well - H

[Jack of Hearts]

Your capabilities in a language that is not your first are remarkable. This poem's posture is not to this reader's taste, but there's no denying there's something well done about it.

For a real freak of nature, you should read some of Bar's stuff. She's not a native English speaker but good god she may be the best of us (and certainly is, at times).







J

[Bar22do]

For a real freak of nature, you should read some of Bar's stuff. She's not a native English speaker but good god she may be the best of us (and certainly is, at times).







J

Am touched, thogh of course your enthusiasm regarding my modest endeavours is highly exaggerated.... Thanks a lot, Jack.

P.S. and the accent should remain strong on "at times"!