Analyze: Behind Skin

[Revolte]

Devourer of my stomach,
lay your hands upon my face
and rip from me what I have owed
to myself–I, not as is seen
but I as is known.

So that others too may know,
and behind this skin will be noted:
the breath behind the lips
and the beat behind the chest.

And I will not be writ
as there will be no linger to expression,
for I will be a star.

[Delta40]

Sorry Revolte but I'm lost. I admit that there are birds chirping outside my window. Perhaps I need a different mindset. I'll come back to it.

[Revolte]

Sorry Revolte but I'm lost. I admit that there are birds chirping outside my window. Perhaps I need a different mindset. I'll come back to it.

Just dig a little.

I plan on memorizing it and performing it, maybe that will make it a tad more clear.

[Revolte]

Well, I only did so much for performing. But if you want to hear the piece:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OqbZaotwgUk&feature=youtu.be

[Jack of Hearts]

Your performance really injects it with zest. And one can sense the powerful declaration in each line. But what it's about, or whether its affect seems appropriate... this reader has no idea. That is to say, the affect doesn't seem appropriate.

The performance aspect is strong in the page, in the content, and then finally in your reading. But this reader isn't convinced of it being genuine.





J

[Revolte]

Okay fine I'll give it away.

It's a direct plea to manifestation of the thing that eats away at your gut when people make false judgments based on what they see.

There are two uses of the letter I. One meaning the person, and the other meaning the actual letter.

In the lines

"And I will not be writ
as there will be no linger to expression,
for I will be a star."

he is explaining the reward: the first line has three meanings, one he is expressing how he won't be a story, or made up character but a living thing. Two a different use of the word writ saying he will no longer be something such as a document, but a person. I suppose those two are almost exactly the same. And three he is saying he won't be something of written word (in this case not DOING, just sitting still, implanted on paper), but experiencing the life he wanted, as the visual first impressions often leave him alone and stationary.

The second line vaguely confirms that by saying that there will be no more waiting to be living as he should (expression meaning he is sharing experience with other living human beings, talking, laughing jumping, playing, all of that good stuff)

The third line further confirms the sentiment by saying that HE (rather then first line's I that is the written word of himself) will be a star.

It's really hard to explain it in full depth hours after having wrote it, it's all there, it's just somewhat complex.

But to some it all up, the entire piece is just speaking to an emotion and the cause of the emotion that has taken a physical form.

It might be simpler to explain the I use like this:

The first stanza has seen and known.

the last stanza has two uses of the letter I.

The first is the seen, and the second is the known.


The video supports the general sentiment, by me walking far away it's hard to see me with the sun, but you know that I'm there. As the piece gets further into it I become easier to see until finally I appear before and in and out of the sun.

Me in the video is the character who is speaking in the piece, wandering in another sort of world, lost, but trying to be seen. My dog just happened to want to be near me at all times.

Of course, the video and the piece are somewhat separate elements. Obviously, I don't like to be blunt, I love when people wonder what the hell is actually going on. I know what it all means, but I don't want to reader to initially have the perfect understanding, I want them to wonder and dissect. And how ironic and misplaced would the sentiment be with a blunt understanding? It would be wrong.