Half Shadowed

[H.C. Field]

Upon the distant gloaming,
Trees half-shadowed bathe in fear.
Taunting day
By darkened death.
The wisps unfold his moistened breath
By night.

[Mojtaba-Iraqi]

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Your text is full of nice and deep images, but unfortunately, I could not get the main idea. I leave the critics to clarify this to get more benefit.