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Delta40
07-11-2012, 12:36 PM
And should I ever see
the child in my own eyes
and realise how beliefs
endure far longer than facts,
I will blunder through
the ravaged village
of my failures,
searching for that sweet shop
to cash in the vouchers
of my experience.
Only in this extreme
shall I be so resolute.

Hawkman
07-11-2012, 08:04 PM
Harden is the wrong word here Delta. It describes the process of becoming hard. In context, what you want to say, is stay hard. "Endure" would be a reasonable substitute.

Live and be well - H

Delta40
07-11-2012, 08:09 PM
Thanks Hawk. Much appreciated.

MystyrMystyry
07-11-2012, 11:46 PM
This is good Delta - I thought the part about cashing in the vouchers was particularly inspired :)

Revolte
07-11-2012, 11:58 PM
This is good Delta - I thought the part about cashing in the vouchers was particularly inspired :)

I agree with ^

Bar22do
07-12-2012, 04:06 PM
we should always be aware of the fact

beliefs
endure far longer than facts

this is so well said, here, Delta.

Delta40
07-12-2012, 04:45 PM
This one should have been titled Everlasting Gobstopper!