Handicapped

[Delta40]

Come, follow this path.
It's all par for the course,
where words flood my world
like manifold friends
sporting red v-neck sweaters
and designer caddies,
surrounded by hills
of multi-coloured pills.
There are holes in the fabric
but as I peel the skin of
another orange tangible
and consider the reality
of dreaming,
my handicap only improves
with each stroke.

[tailor STATELY]

Hi Delta40. Enjoyed this, with a few insignificant quibbles.

L2 comes off as a bit cliché. The last line with "stroke" stumbles for me and first made me think of "having a stroke" (my bad).

The following I found quite nicely done:
There are holes in the fabric
but as I peel the skin of
another orange tangible
and consider the reality
of dreaming,
with the couple "orange tangible" quite witty with word play.

The best to you always,

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

[Delta40]

Thanks for taking the time to review my poem Tailor. The cliche was intentional and I rather like the multiple interpretations that can be drawn from 'with each stroke' myself.

[Bar22do]

And I' worried what happens... it's not good to read "your handicap only improves". Let's hope it's not autobiography and YOU blossom...
It's all so well expressed. Thank you, unsettling (in a powerful sense) poetess D.

[Delta40]

And I' worried what happens... it's not good to read "your handicap only improves".

I've never played golf but I've always wondered if I would be good at it :biggrin5:

[Bar22do]

I've never played golf but I've always wondered if I would be good at it :biggrin5:

I'm sure you're the best at chess! :willy_nilly:

[Jerrybaldy]

Yep. Barking as I thought. Extendeeeeeeeeed Metaphor. You gonna do a rugby one next with odd shaped balls? All golf players lack imagination. fact. maybe. I would bet that golf playing poets are few and far between. just a hunch. You get so much kudos these days you dont even need mine. so quit writing wanking poems :)

[Delta40]

Since you're the SBPITW, I'll come to Bristol in 2013 and meet you in a cafe for guidance on wanking poems Jerry :hat: :smilielol5:

[Jerrybaldy]

I have always wondered and never asked is that first S for second?

[Delta40]

I have always wondered and never asked is that first S for second?

That could be one interpretation. Of course, you're free to use any other 'S' word you like....:D

[Jerrybaldy]

shallowest?

[MystyrMystyry]

I'm not big on golf, tried it but it takes too long to get good at. If golf was short and to the point like this poem I'd possibly give it a another run - but it isn't. It's for boring businessmen to stand around and do deals. And professional golfers? No more than businessmen doing deals.

But what about people who do it for fun? They've obviously had a fun bypass. The couple of times I was coerced into it, well, I haven't associated with those people since...