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[Jack of Hearts]

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[Bar22do]

Absolutely adorable, Jack.

I'm conquered with:

"Is she a girl,
this mess of limbs and dark curls?"

and

"sleep's hand will come"

!!!

Is this crying miracle your own?

Well achieved, so spontaneous, fresh and simple in its beauty!

Thanks a lot!

[AuntShecky]

This manages to be sweet without leaving the bitter taste of saccharine in the mouth. But the best thing about it is how it imitates the rhythm and diction of nursery rhymes, if those little ditties had exquisite imagery (which is what the last verse of this one has.) Well done, Jack.

[Jack of Hearts]

Thanks you two. Means a lot.





J

[Jerrybaldy]

Wasn't meant to be a nursery rhyme maybe but comforted me some how all the same. Good night Jack.

[Jack of Hearts]

Thanks Jer. Goodnight.




J

[firefangled]

Reminded me of Saint Judy's comet, only better, more artfully accomplished and just the right amount of sugar.

[Jeos]

Nice poem indeed.Not a single gram of fat, just "muscle and nerve".