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hallaig
06-10-2012, 05:24 AM
The Balcony of the Salutation Hotel



There’s a balcony in Dumfries,
between willows,
above the black wall of river,
and when the sun’s hung above it,
no doubt at all it’s Venice,
and from Venice isn’t it just a step,
when the light falls on water
like shining pieces of a mirror,
to happiness?
It’s nothing like Venice, you say,
when you’re up there it’s freezing
and unsafe,
but so is dreaming
and there are rats,
rats too, in Venice and in dreaming.
The thing is, you’re thinking
of the Venice in that lagoon,
at the top of the Adriatic,
not the one in my brain where,
lit by electrical impulses
like the Lido at night from Sant‘ Elena,
we will have love and poetry all year long.

Bar22do
06-10-2012, 05:47 AM
This is streaming perfectly... From Venise it is just one step to happiness, to love and poetry...! a quantum leap, here from Dumfries! (btw, I went to look on the Salutation Hotel, looks inviting and soooooo quieter than any of the Adriatic Venise hotels... I'll go there sometimes, for poetry, for love, for happiness... :blush5: Long Live Scotland!

hallaig
06-10-2012, 06:39 AM
Dont get too carried away! Think the real Venice takes a bit of beating.



http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/207/onthenithfergusson.jpg/

hallaig
06-10-2012, 06:48 AM
Can't upload the picture, but there's a link here to the view I'm talking about, painted by the brilliant Chrissie Fergusson in the 1920s



http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/207/onthenithfergusson.jpg/

paradoxical
06-10-2012, 08:57 AM
What a poem!

Bar22do
06-10-2012, 10:11 AM
Carried away, me? well, only for a good cause.

Thanks for the link, it's a great picture just like your poem....!

Jack of Hearts
06-14-2012, 02:34 AM
Sounds like the speaker and the hearer are on two different levels of what Venice might actually be. Sometimes dreaming is cold, 'aig. Nicely done.







J

hallaig
06-14-2012, 05:23 AM
Thanks, should be willows instead of cypresses, it is Scotland, after all!

PrinceMyshkin
06-14-2012, 09:56 AM
Thanks. This runs along as 'merely' a very good poem, the grammar somehow a vital part of it until we get to:


The thing is, you’re thinking
of the Venice in that lagoon,
at the top of the Adriatic,
not the one in my brain where,
lit by electrical impulses
like the Lido at night from Sant‘ Elena,
we will have love and poetry all year long.

where it lifts up into Elysium!

hallaig
06-14-2012, 10:26 AM
Now Elysium's an even harder place to get to! Thanks, Prince.

qimissung
06-14-2012, 08:40 PM
That's a journey I'd like to take! Good one, hallaig.