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[Jack of Hearts]

(dun flew coop)

[Hawkman]

Mine look more like a soaring vulture :D Side to side implies movement, as in, "swaying from side to side." Is this intentional? If not, side by side would be better. I also feel that in the context of snapshot, 'make' would be better than 'like' at the begining of L3. I really like this though Jack, great observation.

Live and be well - H

[PoeticPassions]

I like it better as side TO side, than side by side. It also creates the image of two palms opening up, and you can look at the palms (as a palm reader would)... heart lines wing-shaped, but also the palms are like wings... the imagery is quite nice for such a short poem. I like it, JJ.

And the title is great.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Like a strike of lightning!

[AuntShecky]

As an imagistic poem it works with "palms" as the species of tree, but the title
allows another interpretation-- palms as parts of two pairs of hands.

[DocHeart]

I read this earlier today, while still occupied by the toad (http://plagiarist.com/poetry/4885). Since then, I've placed my palms side by side and stared at them three or four times. Heart lines do look like a bird spreading its wings.

Takes a very different kind of brain to see something like that and write it into a poem.

Thanks for sharing, Jack.

DH

[Bar22do]

This is "wow", title and the image - breathtaking, Jack. Wow.

[paradoxical]

Since then, I've placed my palms side by side and stared at them three or four times. Heart lines do look like a bird spreading its wings.

I did the same thing and was blown away by it. Really nice observation, Jack of Hearts.

[qimissung]

It is a special poem, Jack. :)

[Jack of Hearts]

You are all way too kind. Thanks for the eagle-eye, Hawk, those are some things to think about for sure. This poem must've been alright, though, it got a reply from PP (hi PP). Cross that off the bucket list.

Prince, your work was the inspiration/lent the courage to try a poem like this, so thanks for opening up new possibilities.

Thanks for reading Auntie, on a bad hip even...

Doc, you're going to be ok because you don't really have a toad inside of you. You've got a chance to get free!

Bar, thanks very much for a generous compliment. Where have you been, anyways?

Thanks paradoxical. Glad you liked reading this thing.

Qi- it takes a special writer to make a special poem. Like a 'third-grade-twice' kind of writer...







J

[PoeticPassions]

You are all way too kind. Thanks for the eagle-eye, Hawk, those are some things to think about for sure. This poem must've been alright, though, it got a reply from PP (hi PP). Cross that off the bucket list.





J

ha. well, you know I don't really comment on poems often... it takes a special poem (or maybe a special lit netter) and a special mood for me to leave some kind of response :) :thumbsup: