Time Out

[Hawkman]

Why do we wait to feel the years
and slip between the ancient lies
that promises foretold?

No new enchantments lure
the weary tide to beach itself
upon that bourne from which
no traveller returns.

The idle speculations of a vacant mind
demand no reverence,
no credence to their call;

just dumb obedience
to those old, soft spoken words,
whispered as a prayer upon the wind
in one last expiring breath.

[Buh4Bee]

Really? What is going on with people deleting their poems?

[PrinceMyshkin]

Gone.

but not forgotten!

[Jack of Hearts]

Done flew the coop.






J

[Buh4Bee]

What a jerk! Hahaha!

[Hawkman]

B4B: Although I thought it read rather well, the fact that it had been up for 3 days without illiciting a response I did wonder if it was a bit impenetrable. I suspected that it was below par and on closer examination didn't really make much sense, so I took it down. If you really want to read it I'll put it back up and you can all tell me if it's junk or not.

Prince: Nice to know that one retains a place in memory at least. :D

Jack: Not so much flown the coop as absent for a few days. Even I have to work sometimes...

B4B: Would you care to explain that last remark? them's fighting words, enguarde!

Via con Dios - H

[Silas Thorne]

I must say that I'm reading into this bourne thing. I feel this poem comments on people who waste much of their time in idly speculating, and not practically speculating (and acting), until their days end and they regret not having acted. I read this as a 'Do not go gentle' kind of thing.

If I've completely misread, I've read too much into things. I do that, often.

[Hawkman]

Hi Silas. Yeah, that works for me :D Thanks for droppin in ;)

Live and be well - H

[AuntShecky]

Same theme as "Crossing the Bar," right? Philosophically sound, but a little aloof and removed in tone-- perhaps intentional?

[DocHeart]

I'm sorry I nearly missed this, but so glad I didn't in the end. It's a juicy piece which I intend to revisit several times. Technically, I find it quite superior - as I do most of your poems, Hawk.

Thanks for sharing!

DH

[Hawkman]

Auntie: Yes, I guess there's an element of that in it, though I would argue Tennyson's poem to be anchored in faith, whereas mine would seem to question it... Aloof & removed? Perhaps, or just my habitual alienation leaking out through my verse :D

Doc: thanks for reading and appreciating :)

Live and be well - H

[Jack of Hearts]

Huh, gotta say... Drew the same conclusion as Silas. Death before death kinda thing, time wasted away from living...





J

[Jerrybaldy]

has a depressing feel of inevitability about it. The subject I mean, not your style Hawk, before you enguarde me too !:D
JB

[Catamite]

I don't have much new to add, other than agreeing with the idea of time-wasting and then too little too late regret within the poem, and that it was a really enjoyable read, worth revisiting. Oh and, can a tide actually 'beach' itself, surely a beach is form of land, composed of sand/rock upon shore? But that's only a minor niggle; the flow of that verse is especially lovely.

[Hawkman]

Jack: Thanks for reading. Yes, that's a part of it, certainly, but there's disilusionment in there too.

JB: Yeah, depressing inevitaiblity is about right - lol. When is that asteroid due anyway?

catsmeat: Hi Are you unfamiliar with the term beach? Whales beach themselve quite regularly. Basically it just means washed up or stranded. I rather like the idea of a stranded tide and washed up has connotations which are entirely appropriate ;) Anyway, I'm glad you got something from the poem.

Thanks to you all again. Live and be well - H