i am del esccanis

[ahsiam]

Together they rule
One being alone left unworthy;
Their greater silence-
In a separation of latitude and time
Revealed:
"Whatever must be announced, written and kept-
Must be for a pleasure"
Destroy those who have failed to define.
Fixation occuring through scotoma.
Define it or be defined.

[Hawkman]

I'm afraid I can't figure out what this is about! However, I would heartily recommend that you excise the a before pleasure in L7 and modify L8 to read: "Destroy those who have failed to define." funny you should mention scotoma, I was thinking of using it myself a couple of days ago. I definitely won't now - lol.

Live and be ewll - H

[cacian]

'del escanis' is that a historical/political figure?
nice piece by the way.

[ahsiam]

I'm afraid I can't figure out what this is about! However, I would heartily recommend that you excise the a before pleasure in L7 and modify L8 to read: "Destroy those who have failed to define." funny you should mention scotoma, I was thinking of using it myself a couple of days ago. I definitely won't now - lol.

Live and be ewll - H

thank you very much hawk for your precious comment and advice... i would definitely change the line... this is one poem that after writing it yesterday i have fell in love with.. since you are a poet yourself ,i am sure this would happen to u too ..
and i have decided that this would be my master piece.. since i like mystery ..this is one itself..and i would like to have it remain like that... so it was my own wish that the subject must not be understood by anyone but me..

[ahsiam]

'del escanis' is that a historical/political figure?
nice piece by the way.


Cacian thank you very much for liking it :)

del esccanis is neither a historical nor a political figure ...i am afraid i would like it to remain as a mystery... accept my apology.

[symphony]

Phew. It took me a while to even know what to think of it, let alone write.
I could probably look up a hundred different anagrams of "del esccanis" (one of which I like is "access led in"), but it would still be meaningless if the poet does not wish the meaning to be known (perhaps even the poet would like to forget, which kind of reminds me of Browning-- ‘When I wrote that only God and I knew what it meant. Now only God knows'.) The title becomes even more confounding when the small body of the poem starts and ends --suddenly, I may say-- in third person right after that first person style of writing. That said, I found the poem mesmerizing. It could be about anything – the languages, the sciences, specific or non-specific individuals—who knows. I often think that the beauty of poetry is that it makes the reader free. I’m free to make anything out of it, if I want to make anything out of it. I’m free to enjoy the play of sounds and images without drawing any story or scheme or sense off it. I’m free to think it's mesmerizing without really knowing or caring too much about why I do so.

[PrinceMyshkin]

this is one poem that after writing it yesterday i have fell in love with.. since you are a poet yourself ,i am sure this would happen to u too ..
and i have decided that this would be my master piece.. since i like mystery ..this is one itself..and i would like to have it remain like that... so it was my own wish that the subject must not be understood by anyone but me..

Thank you for these very provocative observations. I most certainly support the first one and would add that unless one falls in love with at least one or two of one's poems, what was the point of writing them?

But as for preferring that this poem "not be understood by anyone but me.." I don't understand that at all. It seems to me like grooming one's self, putting on one's best clothing and then going out in the hope of not being seen?

[ahsiam]

Thank you for these very provocative observations. I most certainly support the first one and would add that unless one falls in love with at least one or two of one's poems, what was the point of writing them?

But as for preferring that this poem "not be understood by anyone but me.." I don't understand that at all. It seems to me like grooming one's self, putting on one's best clothing and then going out in the hope of not being seen?

thanks prince for taking time to read it... :)
just before i wanted to post the real name.. i thought it could mean anything , many distant things, gestures or even specific or non specific individuals (just like symphony said) ..why not letting them...i am giving readers a freedom to get peace out of the poem in their own way...and what i meant must be kept with me and my own piece because readers may not find comfort and may find it too strong to be written by a 21 year old girl..

[Bar22do]

Problematic, but certainly catching attention in a new way, at least for me: it's like setting for a walk to downtown to suddenly find oneself in a fragrant spring field outside the city, with a butterfly on one's shoulder without however being able to enjoy the view...

[ahsiam]

Problematic, but certainly catching attention in a new way, at least for me: it's like setting for a walk to downtown to suddenly find oneself in a fragrant spring field outside the city, with a butterfly on one's shoulder without however being able to enjoy the view...

Wonderful imagination bar.. Though its a little disappointing for you without the view, i myself am very glad to give you the frangrance and the butterfly :)