Astronomical

[MystyrMystyry]

Let's do a runner into Out Of Space
Think we really should be a wentin'
Moons, comets, asteroids are great
Places what we'll pitch our tent on

Get far away from the overdue bills
And accumulatin' late payment fees
Escape from the mountin' creditors
And the rootin' collection agencies

On past Mars and Jupiter we'll sail
Where dare no sheriffs or landlords
To Saturn, Uranus, Neptune farewell
Bid riddance to the engulfing hordes

Goodbye funny little Planetoid Pluto
With that ridiculous demotive suffix
We're soarin' through the Oort Cloud
No post office, no stamps need affix

Here we come sparklin' Andromeda
Or Triangulum will do if you're busy
Screamin' away from the Milky Way
So much Space it's makin' me dizzy

Partying all night with Crazy Aliens
(Although out here it's all day long)
But they're few and rare and unique
It sure beats the maddenin' throng

[Delta40]

That's a fun way to escape the ties which keep us so grounded MM! If only I can remember where I parked my rocket....

[MystyrMystyry]

A rocket's one way of doing it - I want the Heart Of Gold with an Infinite Improbability Drive ;)

[Hawkman]

dis am a reely poppin jive, man. Ah tink S2 me favourite - lol

lib an be lissom - H

[MorpheusSandman]

The combination of the outer space theme with the down-home diction is something quite unique, here! "Where dare no sherrifs or landlords" should probably be changed to something more closely approximating the speech of the rest of the piece, though. When you write in idiomatic language one of the things to remember is to employ it throughout, as you're essentially speaking in another voice, and it can be easy to forget and revert back to something less specific.

[Bar22do]

Ah! to escape the maddening throng...! A Polish poet Galczynski dreamed about it in his poem "To have a tiny little house on the moon..." More modest in his ambition than you, he lived a few decades before us, too...

Ever enjoying your fantastic imagination and skill!!! best to you!

[firefangled]

I enjoyed this getaway.

I'm thinking, I shot the Klingon, but I did not shoot the Romulan.

[MystyrMystyry]

Thanks Hawk :)

[MystyrMystyry]

Thanks Morph :)

[MystyrMystyry]

Thankyou Bar22do :)

[MystyrMystyry]

Thankyou Firefangled :)

[AuntShecky]

There's a bit of "Yoda speech" -- the literary term is "hyperbaton" here and there, such as the last line of the fourth stanza. And do you mean maddening throng or-- as in the Hardy title-- "madding"?

Other than that, I found this to be a good one. Resonates with someone who has many medical bills, say. You've tapped into a universal desire, once voiced by The Voice (Francis albert Sinatra): "Let's Get Away from It All."

Your stuff is always fun to read!

[MystyrMystyry]

Thankyou Aunty :)

You might be right - I was just swamped with bills one day and getting increasingly depressed. When I looked at the gasbill and learnt the supply charge was twice as much as the cost of the actual gas consumed it tipped me over the edge. So not just bill swamped, but thief swamped, and faceless phone person swamped, and-...

I wanted to hide in Tasmania and live out my days in the rainforest under an assumed pseudoplume or nomdenym or something - still do in fact.