A poem. Can you uncover the meaning.

[michaelsbearre]

Here is something I wrote.


Of this lusting hound
oh how I wonder how.
You find me every time,
no matter where I hide.

I cloak my scent
with fumes of roses.
Doing so
without imposing…

Where I could be
Or where I hide.
Doing so
As you pass right on by.

As this day fades to night,
I often wonder why,
My scent compels your lusting nose,
Everyday you find me.

No matter where I go.

Playing with metering and getting a feel for the rhythm. Can you discover the metaphorical meaning behind this????????

[Delta40]

The metaphorical meaning?? at 5.11am in the morning?? Are you crazy?? lol. All I thought about were bees, women and dogs. As for playing with meter, there is a rhythm to your poem so I'm going to assume that you're not so concerned about what you have written so much as whether the sound works. However for me the two really need to come together to be successful and I'm not really taken by the poem itself. You don't need a period in L2 after S1. L2&3 of S4 should not have a comma as it doesn't make grammatical sense when followed by L4. It's more than punctuation though. It's also about word usage. Perhaps because you've set the readers a puzzle, you're limited in some way - I'm not sure.

Anyway, drinking my first cup of tea of the day, I do know you have great potential when it comes to writing Michaelsbearre and have a much greater grasp of rhythm than I do so at the very least, I hope somebody figures out the puzzle!

[michaelsbearre]

The metaphorical meaning?? at 5.11am in the morning?? Are you crazy?? lol. All I thought about were bees, women and dogs. As for playing with meter, there is a rhythm to your poem so I'm going to assume that you're not so concerned about what you have written so much as whether the sound works. However for me the two really need to come together to be successful and I'm not really taken by the poem itself. You don't need a period in L2 after S1. L2&3 of S4 should not have a comma as it doesn't make grammatical sense when followed by L4. It's more than punctuation though. It's also about word usage. Perhaps because you've set the readers a puzzle, you're limited in some way - I'm not sure.

Anyway, drinking my first cup of tea of the day, I do know you have great potential when it comes to writing Michaelsbearre and have a much greater grasp of rhythm than I do so at the very least, I hope somebody figures out the puzzle!

Thanks Delta. I kinda threw it together. They were lines in my head and decided to just put them out. But, the puzzle is hidden beneath each line and comes together as a whole.

[MorpheusSandman]

FWIW, I don't think you mean "metaphorical meaning" but rather "symbolic meaning" since if this isn't about a bloodhound actually searching you out then it would be allegorical. I could imagine many scenarios that could fit this symbolically, eg, perhaps the speaker is being pursued by a potential lover whom they have no interest in and are trying to hide from, but failing. The "lusting" (which is used twice to describe the hound) would be a clue.

I'm more interested in your "playing with metering" since there isn't a consistent meter to the piece, even though most of it is iambic trimeter, with a few lines of dimeter and tetrameter.