Supermoon

[paradoxical]

moonrise
over the world,
above a vast
cybernetic web,
exabytes of binary data
moving across continents

a technosystem
of global revolution
now under surveillance;
the watchful eye
of a capitalist state

every email,
every web search recorded

an artificial world
of commerce and advertising,
video games
and pornography

as another species dies,
as the oceans die

money and power,
the ultimate dream
of technocracy,
a world police state

cameras everywhere,
cops everywhere,
even prisons are
now run for profit

millions enslaved
by debt and poverty,
entire countries
unable to even pay
the interest on loans

riots in every country now,
tear gas
and smashed windows

as the elites
make their last, final push,
a global uprising
the only solution,
death the only escape

[ShadowsCool]

Excellent perspective. Yea, greed is behind every bad thing indeed.

[paradoxical]

Excellent perspective. Yea, greed is behind every bad thing indeed.

Thank you very much, ShadowsCool. I agree, and often wonder how much longer this system can continue. It seems that something has to give. Just look at the situation in Greece. A disaster caused by capitalism!

By the way, I think you have a unique voice here on LitNet. Keep going.

[MorpheusSandman]

Very 1984-ish. I like how the various "rich rhymes" seem to echo both of the theme of greed and the omnipresence of what's being described. My suggestion would be to trim back on some of the more direct statements, like the last line, or most of line 8. These are the subjects that need dramatizing rather than just stating. If you take too much of a macro view, people can too easily disconnect from it (as they can any social issue).