a songe

[cacian]

a serenade of thoughts inside a dream of sorts or it is a mix of both for a feeling of coeur ?
a flirt of pools of ideals that lurk inside a deep, a moeur perhaps, a scent, a fantasy of lands in multiple amounts that stir the human flair
Is it a lure of wishes that stroll across the kisses, the crib of all blisses or maybe it's a plurr to all this is, the synchrony of flaunts to a much desired wants in return of a plaud, in symphony of tolls.
whatever it maybe can someoene say or see in sense and of intent what meaning songe is be as it may shed a vie about a sentence plea that writes about a stream, in a melange of free, surreal it may string, as much of it as a word is totally unclear.

[Alexander III]

The words are delightful, and there is a charming music to this piece. But in substance I find it too vague, it feels more like a pleasant ditty which amuses the senses briefly and quickly fades without leaving much thought. I think if you were to be more concrete with words and thoughts it would give the piece more incentive to linger.

[cacian]

Alexander I thank you for your lovely constructive feedback.
I see what you mean about being concrete, I thought I made it slightely concrete by using the title
''songe'' which in French means an illusion/day dream/a fantasm.
I am here trying to portray what might we mean by illusion.
Thank you again:)