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PrinceMyshkin
05-03-2012, 04:10 PM
Oh, the innocence of the very young,
who don’t even know
what innocence is!

miyako73
05-03-2012, 05:04 PM
LOL! Brilliant. Three lines, but enough to tell me the deceiving nature of innocence (among youth and teens) or the beautiful imagery of it (among babies and kids).

qimissung
05-03-2012, 06:08 PM
And which is part of their appeal, I think. Sweetly done, Prince.

cogs
05-03-2012, 07:00 PM
between the title and the exclamation is a jump, but i don't know, in such a small space, how to overcome this gap. okay, one quick suggestion is 'Look!' but idk.
wonderful lines, that i've often thought to myself.

aliengirl
05-04-2012, 06:35 AM
Prince you've said so much in these three lines that I should say the obvious-

"What oft was thought, but ne'er so well expressed"

Superb!

MorpheusSandman
05-04-2012, 09:13 AM
One doesn't need a word to express a state of being until one has felt its polar opposite. It's a nice poem that expresses that idea. Technically, I feel the opening "Oh" and concluding "!" is a bit too much. I would suggest one or the other, or maybe neither. It seems like it dictates the sense more than is needed.