Grading on a Curve

[hack]

I might believe
that I am not the center of the universe
but the earth slopes away from me
in every direction

[Delta40]

lol. Good observation. Another might be, it's amazing we don't realise how easy it could be to just roll off into obscurity....

[PrinceMyshkin]

It is hard to comprehend
that you are not the center of universe
when the earth slopes away from you
in every direction

Shouldn't there be a the before universe? Wonderfully succinct poem. Reminds me of one of my own:


MEDITATION


The earth is a beach in space
we cross at an angle to the sea.
There is no walking parallel


with it. Or with ourselves. Spiral
to the root, we travel
crooked at the source. Without


and within, these eyes, this beach,
this skin--the elements puddle
and, for all we know, hold firm.

[hack]

I like yours better.

[cafolini]

There occurs not such thing as a Uni-Verse. Scientifically, it is The Verse of the UNI. It only exists and has no physical limit but in infinity. As such, every point must be a center. That's an Aristotelian, obsolete, conclusion. Lucretius also thought that way. Today, it keeps that existential meaning, but it cannot occur measurably.

[MorpheusSandman]

It's a good observation, but I feel it could use more of a poetic treatment ala Prince's poem. As is it feels too much like chopped prose. An interesting experiment might be to set "yourself" as the center of the poem and have the poem's beginning and end sloping away from it. It would also be nice if you could build it around that image rather than around the statement "it is hard to comprehend."