Haggard Angel's Embrace

[wagravity]

It was an unforgettable moment
No one's unforgettable when you're a dope head
I remember that she was my best friend
With vague still-frames of the days her tears were shed

A warehouse of childish temper still lingers
It's reoccurring with every thought of her
A brush of good feeling, most caressing fingers
Recollecting her good, my evil, but it's all a blur

Myself on display, I splash water on my face
In attempt to refresh the taste
Of this haggard angel's embrace
Who's not concerned with a constant fall from grace

Awaking on knives, several years gone by
You still capture me with those giant brown eyes
Reaching across the bed, it's not you by my side
I realize I've escaped but the artist never dies

You're still pretty but somehow I already knew that
It didn't take this newly posted photograph
Feet don't fail while I backtrack to a new path
Where the flames ignite and I'm caught up in the backdraft

[Delta40]

I prefer the first 2 stanzas. They're honest and combine quite well with each other. I think you lose your way with the rest as the rhyming becomes even more central to what you're writing and so they appear more forced than the first 2. Have you considered dumping the rhyme element to give it some free flow since the thoughts themselves are really quite beautiful?