Describing Perfection

[drakemortuare13]

I gaze at pictures of her,
Each a snapshot of perfection.
The glow of her light can be seen
Even through the dull polaroid.

Her eyes, her cheeks, her lips,
All so full of life.
Nothing could be more precious
Than to see her vivid smile.

Her heart is as pure as gold,
Her skin warm to the touch.
But all I have is this picture
She is a fair distance away.

Four hundred miles I would walk
To see her shining face.
What I have I would give away
To hold her close again.

[Bewlay Brother]

The fourth line in your third stanza should be eliminated. "She is a fair distance away" That much is obvious after the third line "But all I have is this picture" and the next line just kills the power of that line. I know that messes up your 4 line stanza format, so you might have to change things around a little if you plan on getting rid of the line. This is all just my opinion though. (and you have typo on last word of poem)

[drakemortuare13]

Thanks for the constructive criticism, but I don't worry too much about the structure or flow of a poem. I focus is on getting my emotions onto paper, regardless of how it looks. But I will take the advice about the typo.