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MystyrMystyry
04-02-2012, 04:38 PM
alarm clock roars
a new day
awake alert

alarmed

out the window
it flies like time
without the fun

glazier

good riddance
cacophonic
ticking machine

climb off bed
roboticly
peel away pj's

surprise

grinding cogs gnash
clunking gears clang

rusty nuts
broken bolts
joints seize

need a lube

as

bits

drop


off

AuntShecky
04-03-2012, 03:41 PM
This is terrific: a robot with an alarm clock. Nice spoof of Kafka.

best line: time flies/ without the fun

tylerdf
04-03-2012, 10:32 PM
this is great!

MystyrMystyry
04-06-2012, 05:06 AM
Thankyou Aunty :) Not often I earn a 'terrific' adjective - I'm supposing you mean in the original sense? But I'll gladly take both :smilewinkgrin:

MystyrMystyry
04-06-2012, 05:09 AM
Thankyou Tylerdf :)

'Great' is good too!

tylerdf
04-06-2012, 07:47 AM
Thankyou Tylerdf :)

'Great' is good too!

This deserves better than "great". I was probably drunk.