dimentional

[cacian]

part not here for now
but live the day today
consider this array:
a feeling
or
emotions
two genuine duet
worthy of spoken meanings

a feeling is a streaming
of actions and elations
underneath a caption
of mesmerized intentions
they sway from certain notions
for reasons better loosened
they are the heart of motions
that beat eternal fractions
and lead us to attractions
amongst ourselves and naturals

emotions are tenatious
they point to all dimentions
they cruise upon our minds
in cubic specks of raptions
they luminate our senses
and circulate our thoughts
amongst our deepest wants
in riveting sensations

life is but a passion
the center to all devotions
seize both feelings and emotions
and be the greatest mention

[Delta40]

You've read my thoughts on the punctuation thread Cacian. If I mentally put the pauses where they belong, this reads much better than how it is presented - as if one must take a deep breath and read non stop to the end (My face turned purple :-) This is highlighted further by the lack of any upper case from an otherwise interesting, swirling thought poem. If spelling isn't your strong point, check it before posting.

Raptions? Sounds mysterious but I can't find it in the dictionary so I think you've invented a new word Cacian. Well done!

[cafolini]

You've read my thoughts on the punctuation thread Cacian. If I mentally put the pauses where they belong, this reads much better than how it is presented - as if one must take a deep breath and read non stop to the end (My face turned purple :-) This is highlighted further by the lack of any upper case from an otherwise interesting, swirling thought poem. If spelling isn't your strong point, check it before posting.

Raptions? Sounds mysterious but I can't find it in the dictionary so I think you've invented a new word Cacian. Well done!

Pretty good stuff by Cacian. Raptions might be a variation of raptures. It's not Cacian's problem that dictionaries are incomplete.
Emotion -> feeling. Feeling -> emotion. Life is indeed passion, more than difficult to define without assasination.

[Delta40]

Well it's her very own word now Cafolini.

[cacian]

Thank you both Delta40 and cafolini for a construcitve and interesting feedback!
Spelling does not seem to agree with me at all and I so I must get on to it indeed:blush:
raption is indeed a new word, I am glad I found it and yes as cafolini said it does come from rapture..hehe.