Patriot

[soloIQ]

Go forth young lads
We shall honor you
Disregard those fears
The Proud The Few

1st we pick a fight
Boast then send in others
Oh and don't forget
to hug goodbye your Mothers

You we love so dear
Please keep us from the harm
While we stay at home
Relaxing at the farm

Know you have our hearts
and bold words for this war
Tho'...Should you not return
We'll make us a few more

[Hawkman]

Not bad, this. It needs a little work though. The last line in S1 seem to have no contextual continuation from the preceeding three lines. fears - proud and/or few? doesn't really make sense. the impression given is that you strung the last line together to end with a rhyme. Rhyming is fine, but only if it makes sense contextually and gramtically with proper syntax.

S2: if you mean first, write first, not 1st. It's not a date. Punctuation would also help, eg you need a comma after Boast. The last line of this stanza is a bit clunky. It might have been better to write:
"and goodbye-hug your mothers". It scans better and is more creative.

The first line of S3 is gramatcially incorrect as well as clumsy. "you we love so dearly" would be correct but it would read better as : "you we dearly love"

the next line should lose the definite article. By saying "The harm" you make the harm specific, but you don't specify it. better to say," keep us free from harm", which also scans better. Not sure about, "at the farm", on the farm would be better, I think.

In S4 the archaic contraction of "though" and the ellipsis are inappropriate here.

Sort these little glitches and It's a pretty good poem.

Live and be well - H