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cacian
03-28-2012, 05:45 AM
words come and go
just like the sun
they warm the soul
they seal the falls
to make you strong
to you alone
forever more

you come and go
just like the wind
weather permit,
are you surprised
the breeze has wits
and something bright
that makes this life
slightly up right?

they come and go
those thoughts that mean
so much to you
and yet they flee
somewhere to rest
to give you a view
clear as the dew
to
free your mind
and find a time
to be just you

all comes and goes
just like the
rain
and water leafs
that follow reefs
life is a true
symbol of you.

slipee
03-30-2012, 10:57 AM
Nice!

:)

Little Gal
04-01-2012, 11:26 AM
it has a very lively rhythm... the movement..a light "sway" can be felt with your every "come and go" ...
I like the way you have wanted to create a more universal meaning out of the apparent simplicity...
My favorite lines..
"the breeze has wits
and something bright
that makes this life
slightly up right? "

cacian
04-03-2012, 03:27 AM
Thank you both Slipee and Little Gal! Glad you enjoyed it!

Bewlay Brother
04-03-2012, 03:22 PM
This was a lovely poem! I was able to just read through the whole thing quickly and although maybe not digesting the exact, true meaning of everything, I just felt the meaning and intention of everything.