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Captain Pike
03-21-2012, 10:18 PM
I am reading one of my favorite authors, W. Somerset Maugham, and enjoying it (why would I continue, right?). I'm reading Liza of Lambeth and I want to just give you an example of something that I like about reading these a-little-less-than-contemporary Englishman. On my copy, it's page 12, in any case, it's right in the beginning of the chapter.

… they were invariably nursing babies, and most of them showed clear signs that the present object of the maternal care would soon be ousted by a new arrival.

On the one hand, a lot of Maugham's work is rife with this kind of lengthy, almost poetic description of landscape, and yet I don't feel bored and anxious for him to get on with the story. I am perfectly capable and often do feel this way about some more modern writers who seem to be, "taking the long way around the barn" – meaning, I believe I already know what is trying to be said, so that I'm dragging it out of the text, frustratingly.

Obviously, there is no pat answer to this question. Maybe it's the mood I prefer to be in when reading Henry James or Somerset Maugham. Today's setting was in the fairly early morning, outside on my patio, in a comfortable chair with the sun beaming down warmly on me, coffee near at hand. I smile while reading along, perfectly willing to go back and make sure I understand just what was being said. I trot along through the character descriptions and plot settings, much the way some of the Impressionists have painted; significant detail in places your liable to be looking and want the artist to show you just how hungry the eyes were but with plenty of nearly open canvas elsewhere, so that the mind can generate its own, more plausible detail according to the particular observer.

Were these guys really good? I mean there is so much fiction being produced today that none of us will ever be able to pursue more than a small pile of authors' complete works. I guess I'm getting old.

I like how the British authors sometimes say, "coming round the barn", rather than, "around", as we, of the colonies have gotten used to – just like strip malls and multiplex cinemas. Yes, and I know, Henry James was technically an American – but he wrote, "The Portrait of Lady", a book which I might very possibly owe my life to, because of the wonderful depiction of a man more or less confined to a chair, but with dignity to spare. But that is another story.

Trask
03-21-2012, 11:17 PM
I think in some cases such as with Faulkner's sentences that frequently take up almost half a page it can be a bit much.

billl
03-22-2012, 01:13 AM
Well, the fourth paragraph of the OP was a pleasure to read, despite maybe being a meandering inspection of the paint job the barn had been given earlier.

AlysonofBathe
03-22-2012, 03:21 AM
I think in some cases such as with Faulkner's sentences that frequently take up almost half a page it can be a bit much.

Quentin's section of The Sound and the Fury, where grammar and any sort of sense are just thrown out the window. I always liked crazy Quentin though. :)

Cheers,
Alyson

Captain Pike
03-22-2012, 10:34 AM
To me that must've been the epitome of having, "made it", when, in your own lifetime, having your adapted screenplays being box office hits featuring renowned actors of the time.
Sometimes I think, that would've been the cats pajamas – to be working with the Paul Newmans or the Gary Coopers – you know, having your own folding chair with your name printed across the back rest, sitting back there with Howard Hawks, etc., being paid outrageous consulting fees for knowledge of your whims regarding how a certain scene should go! Eee gah... to me that would be it, pardon my childishness.

A perfect example is Hemingway. Literally, a legend in his own time. Then finally, the golden years of maturity began to shine ever so brightly, and then, Blam! He blows his head off with a shotgun, unable to stand himself – his depression any longer!
Wow, the power of feelings. Maybe I'm luckier than I realize – maybe I've got everything a man could want.