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cacian
03-12-2012, 07:14 AM
friendship is like a mind
it gets better with time
it gives you plentiful fines
amongst your bestest folds

happyness is a chic
you wear it like a slick
it fits your daily goals
no matter what your roles

elegance is a plus
it gives your lure a pure
and prompts your life to highs
and make you look the part

romance is mundane lust
better love then pursutes
promises and they loose
all sensible amour

skip the spoils of choice
they slow your pace and awe
take feelings as they come
they make a better bond
for you to write a song
and make you center strong

Buh4Bee
03-12-2012, 11:19 AM
Cacian, I have been a fan of your poetry lately. I like your message in this poem.

cacian
03-12-2012, 11:23 AM
Cacian, I have been a fan of your poetry lately. I like your message in this poem.

Hi Buh4Bee
Thank you for a lovely feedback. So glad you like this piece.:smile5:

BienvenuJDC
03-12-2012, 11:26 AM
Ok...I really like what you did with "fines" and "folds". It doesn't rhyme, but the words compliment each other. Is there a name for that? It's more than just alliteration I think. But it definitely has a ring of alliteration to it.

Buh4Bee
03-14-2012, 02:25 PM
Hi Buh4Bee
Thank you for a lovely feedback. So glad you like this piece.:smile5:

You don't cherish my words? Hahaha!:blush: