con202
03-08-2012, 03:46 PM
v2 Below!
THANKS FOR THE MEMORY
The sky danced with the stars twinkling high above. A thrilling sight of light shining in the air. Lilith loved looking at the stars. She liked sitting in the quiet of the countryside and looking up at the oh so majestic view of light breaking through the deep black sheet above. A warm summer night, she lay down in the thick grass on a hill near her Aunt's small cottage. Hardly blinking, she absorbed the brilliant spectacle before her. Just like many times before, she had prepared a small picnic, and a telescope for a closer look at distant objects, sometimes even planets. Tonight, there wasn't a cloud to be seen. The moon in full view, illuminating the abundance of lilies shielding Lilith from civilisation. The cold air didn't bother her, she was used to spending many hours outside studying, with great fascination, the many, many types of astrological wonders she could find. In Lilith's eyes... this was a perfect night.
Lilith had been lying in the grass for quite some time. Her telescope still eagerly trained on the twinkling sky, waiting for that glimmer of something unique against it's lens. She wasn't quite sure how long had passed since she last checked the time, and she was so relaxed on the hill that her mind wouldn't even ponder over the thought of getting up to check. As she looked back over from the telescope, which had held Lilith's watch in it's handle, she remembered a clever, astrological way of telling time without a clock. She darted her eye's across the skies, searching for the North Star. Ah, she found it in a mere few seconds, it glittered while remaining stationary. She followed it's path straight up to find it contacting with the outer edge of “the big dipper”. In her head, she made the calculations, added 4 hours, doubled the time, and took away the answer from 24 to give her a surprisingly accurate time, 12:00 am exactly which, unfortunately for Lilith, was the agreed time for bed. Again she glanced over to the telescope, the very thought of moving disgruntling her. She brought her hands up to her face and released a massive yawn, her hands blanking out the stars in front of her. All she could see was black...
She awoke. Lifted herself from the cold, metal floor. Slightly dazed she found herself contained in a room of darkness. Her senses muddled, a dizzying effect, the room seemed to trap her. She lifted her hands to what she thought was her face, yet she couldn't even see the slightest outline. A sudden sense of dread washed over her – she can't be blind? Shaking her head she doubted her blinded eyes, rubbing them with fierce determination. Unknowingly she backed further and further to the edge of the room, her elbow banged against the metallic sheen of the wall, a metal clang echoed, the sound somehow following the wall's curved shape which edged towards the centre of the room. She nursed her suddenly sore elbow. Her eye's soon began to adjust to the harsh black. She took a cautious step forward, barely making a sound. She stopped. Waiting for an alert. Again she took a step, beginning to creep towards the centre of the room. As her eyes continued to adjust she began to notice a tall, extremely slim figure begin to bleed from the shadows, it stood out, unique from the other shapes forming around it. Lilith thought, at first, that this figure was just a statue, or even her imagination. It's long, slim neck flexed. It's head, which was unusually oval shaped, moved to continue viewing what was in front of it. Lilith carefully adjusted her movement so she could avoid this odd figure, holding her breath as she attempted to pass round it's side to find an exit. Alas, her attempts were futile.
“Hello Lilith”
The figure spoke, It's voice was oddly welcoming, “we've been expecting you.”
It clicked a button from a desk of many in front of it, the wall's surrounding Lilith burst into a tremendous feast of light as a massive screen surrounding them formed on the curved wall's, destroying the shadows.
“It's been a long time wouldn't you say...” the figure turned, It's face in full view of Lilith. It's skin appeared a dull hue of blue, and what can only be described as large grey gills were engraved in to It's cheeks. It's slim ghostly body cloaked in a long blue robe which drooped onto the floor, the collar of which flared with an unusual, circular design. It's eyes captured Lilith, and apart from the fact It had the same number of limbs as any of us, these were the only familiar sight.
“Oh...” It said disappointingly “and who might you be?” It questioned, It's voice remaining gentle, yet It's face failing to hide It's true thoughts.
“Lilith” she replied “I mean, Lilith Tillet” she corrected.
“No” It whooshed round to face the keyboard again.
“What do you mean no!?” Lilith asked, she quickly stormed over to the figure.
“I mean... no”
“Huh?” Lilith glanced sideways at the figure, puzzled.
“Urgh...” It's frustration vented, “I mean no, you're not, at least not yet anyway...”
“Er...?” Lilith's confusion not solved.
“Ohhh wait” It lifted It's head from It's frantic working “I think there's a problem”
It looked up to the screen above. The graphics zoomed through the many files of what appeared to be ID's and boring forms, complete with pictures. Some ID's from Earth, while some not. The figure signaled with a wave to the screen, as if telling it to stop, the screen complied almost like it was watching them. The figure brought up Lilith's “ID”, the information contained was everything from where she was born, to the last person she spoke to, that being her Aunt. Lilith suddenly became concerned, this thing appeared to know more about her than first thought, an uneasy fact. Lilith's picture was blurred, censored out of the ID.
“What is this?” Lilith muttered, she became quiet suddenly.
“Nothing... just forms” The figure replied, still fixated on the screen.
It pointed It's finger upwards.
“Ahh” It realised It's mistake, “So... how long have you been on this planet exactly?”
“Umm... fifteen years?” Lilith squinted at the strangeness of the question, though the figure reacted as if this was the right answer.
“Oh!” It jumped up, again rising over Lilith, reaching up about 8 feet tall. “There's your problem!”
“Okay...” Lilith followed the figure as it darted to another workspace across the room.
“Now now, no time to waste! I'm just too early that's all!” The figure pulled a lever, an intense stream of light emerged from the wall, a passage to the outside world, “Away with you now”. It directed Lilith to the passage, she resisted It's gentle push, turning to face It head on.
“No now wait, I'm sorry, but I'm not stupid” she stressed, “now... now please tell me what all this is”. The figure appeared taken aback, it could sense Lilith's worry.
“There will be time for questions soon enough Lilith, but for now I must ask you to leave” The figure raised It's voice, stern, yet at the same time nervous. Lilith stared It down, keeping cool control of the situation, she backed down in her aggressive tactics. She opened her mouth again to speak, yet her eyes were drawn to the screen. Her mouth remained open, shocked at what she saw.
“What is that?” she nervously voiced.
“A death certificate” It answered clinically.
“...Whose death certificate?” Lilith became more worried.
“Yours” The figure said this without even flinching, as if it were yet another “normal” part of their conversation. Lilith read what was written, at the bottom was a simple inscription reading “Car Accident”. Lilith broke down, she struggled to hold back the tears.
“Don't worry” The figure reassured, trying to remain upright, as if a reputation had to be upheld, It's resistance to her tears was thin, “it... it's going to be okay, I promise”.
The figure held out it's elongated, gentle hands. It brushed Lilith's cheek, drying off her tears.
“It will happen far from now... but you will be ready.” It smirked confidently, “You are special after all”
Lilith glanced up into the figure's inspiring eyes, they swirled with a deep blue not noticed by Lilith before, as if It's pupils were black holes and the colour a swirling galaxy. She gave It a thanking smile.
“Who are you?” she broke her silence, regaining her composure. The figure backed away, letting the light take hold of Lilith. She tried to resist but was dragged further into the immersive white. The figure faded into nothingness.
Lilith plunged into her handbag. She frantically moved all sorts of bits and pieces to get to the one that really mattered, her phone. She was already an hour late for an important meeting, one to decide the fate of the entire world's venture into the stars. She thought of what her boss would think, an image of him being disappointed at giving such an inexperienced twenty something year old such a massive job, but she was determined. She looked up, the street light across remained green. She glanced around to check for traffic, nothing still. All was safe, she began to venture across the road.
Suddenly she broke her stride. Her mind wouldn't allow her to continue. She fazed out from her obsession with the phone to notice a familiar pattern, it was the houses along the road, the street markings like signs, she had seen these before? She wasn't sure if it was from a dream or not, but she had seen them before! She quickly contemplated over her next move, to continue as normal, or listen to an obsessed mind. She decided... continue as normal. She took a step. She stopped. The sound of screeching filling her ears, a killing reflection blinding her. The bonnet of a car whizzing past her feet, her hair caught by the speed of the wind. She couldn't breathe. The car crashed into a telephone mast, sparks flying, the mast plummeted to the ground. Lilith had remembered why she paused... the one thing she could never forget, was forgotten. She wasn't quite sure how she had, but this wasn't the time to think about it. She ran to help the driver inside calling for help, clearly this was a lucky escape.
“Have you taken care of the suspect?” a voice croaked, it's inhuman echo lingered.
“Yes master...” a higher pitched voice replied, it's weasely tone irritating, “He is banished, he will never meddle with our plans again”
“Good, never again will that disappointment bathe in our sacred darkness” it chuckled with amusement.
“And our plan?”
“It goes ahead” it continued” “Soon. This planet will be ours... their souls given up for the taking... every, precious soul... all of them”
“Very good master” it's footsteps echoed as it walked away, it slid the door open revealing the screams of many thousands of souls, trapped. They again became quieter as the footsteps left the room. The door slid close silently.
Quick question also... what or who do you think the "figures" are? :wink5:
And thanks for taking the time to read! Constructive critisicm please, looking to get a view from the experts on how to improve each time.
THANKS FOR THE MEMORY
The sky danced with the stars twinkling high above. A thrilling sight of light shining in the air. Lilith loved looking at the stars. She liked sitting in the quiet of the countryside and looking up at the oh so majestic view of light breaking through the deep black sheet above. A warm summer night, she lay down in the thick grass on a hill near her Aunt's small cottage. Hardly blinking, she absorbed the brilliant spectacle before her. Just like many times before, she had prepared a small picnic, and a telescope for a closer look at distant objects, sometimes even planets. Tonight, there wasn't a cloud to be seen. The moon in full view, illuminating the abundance of lilies shielding Lilith from civilisation. The cold air didn't bother her, she was used to spending many hours outside studying, with great fascination, the many, many types of astrological wonders she could find. In Lilith's eyes... this was a perfect night.
Lilith had been lying in the grass for quite some time. Her telescope still eagerly trained on the twinkling sky, waiting for that glimmer of something unique against it's lens. She wasn't quite sure how long had passed since she last checked the time, and she was so relaxed on the hill that her mind wouldn't even ponder over the thought of getting up to check. As she looked back over from the telescope, which had held Lilith's watch in it's handle, she remembered a clever, astrological way of telling time without a clock. She darted her eye's across the skies, searching for the North Star. Ah, she found it in a mere few seconds, it glittered while remaining stationary. She followed it's path straight up to find it contacting with the outer edge of “the big dipper”. In her head, she made the calculations, added 4 hours, doubled the time, and took away the answer from 24 to give her a surprisingly accurate time, 12:00 am exactly which, unfortunately for Lilith, was the agreed time for bed. Again she glanced over to the telescope, the very thought of moving disgruntling her. She brought her hands up to her face and released a massive yawn, her hands blanking out the stars in front of her. All she could see was black...
She awoke. Lifted herself from the cold, metal floor. Slightly dazed she found herself contained in a room of darkness. Her senses muddled, a dizzying effect, the room seemed to trap her. She lifted her hands to what she thought was her face, yet she couldn't even see the slightest outline. A sudden sense of dread washed over her – she can't be blind? Shaking her head she doubted her blinded eyes, rubbing them with fierce determination. Unknowingly she backed further and further to the edge of the room, her elbow banged against the metallic sheen of the wall, a metal clang echoed, the sound somehow following the wall's curved shape which edged towards the centre of the room. She nursed her suddenly sore elbow. Her eye's soon began to adjust to the harsh black. She took a cautious step forward, barely making a sound. She stopped. Waiting for an alert. Again she took a step, beginning to creep towards the centre of the room. As her eyes continued to adjust she began to notice a tall, extremely slim figure begin to bleed from the shadows, it stood out, unique from the other shapes forming around it. Lilith thought, at first, that this figure was just a statue, or even her imagination. It's long, slim neck flexed. It's head, which was unusually oval shaped, moved to continue viewing what was in front of it. Lilith carefully adjusted her movement so she could avoid this odd figure, holding her breath as she attempted to pass round it's side to find an exit. Alas, her attempts were futile.
“Hello Lilith”
The figure spoke, It's voice was oddly welcoming, “we've been expecting you.”
It clicked a button from a desk of many in front of it, the wall's surrounding Lilith burst into a tremendous feast of light as a massive screen surrounding them formed on the curved wall's, destroying the shadows.
“It's been a long time wouldn't you say...” the figure turned, It's face in full view of Lilith. It's skin appeared a dull hue of blue, and what can only be described as large grey gills were engraved in to It's cheeks. It's slim ghostly body cloaked in a long blue robe which drooped onto the floor, the collar of which flared with an unusual, circular design. It's eyes captured Lilith, and apart from the fact It had the same number of limbs as any of us, these were the only familiar sight.
“Oh...” It said disappointingly “and who might you be?” It questioned, It's voice remaining gentle, yet It's face failing to hide It's true thoughts.
“Lilith” she replied “I mean, Lilith Tillet” she corrected.
“No” It whooshed round to face the keyboard again.
“What do you mean no!?” Lilith asked, she quickly stormed over to the figure.
“I mean... no”
“Huh?” Lilith glanced sideways at the figure, puzzled.
“Urgh...” It's frustration vented, “I mean no, you're not, at least not yet anyway...”
“Er...?” Lilith's confusion not solved.
“Ohhh wait” It lifted It's head from It's frantic working “I think there's a problem”
It looked up to the screen above. The graphics zoomed through the many files of what appeared to be ID's and boring forms, complete with pictures. Some ID's from Earth, while some not. The figure signaled with a wave to the screen, as if telling it to stop, the screen complied almost like it was watching them. The figure brought up Lilith's “ID”, the information contained was everything from where she was born, to the last person she spoke to, that being her Aunt. Lilith suddenly became concerned, this thing appeared to know more about her than first thought, an uneasy fact. Lilith's picture was blurred, censored out of the ID.
“What is this?” Lilith muttered, she became quiet suddenly.
“Nothing... just forms” The figure replied, still fixated on the screen.
It pointed It's finger upwards.
“Ahh” It realised It's mistake, “So... how long have you been on this planet exactly?”
“Umm... fifteen years?” Lilith squinted at the strangeness of the question, though the figure reacted as if this was the right answer.
“Oh!” It jumped up, again rising over Lilith, reaching up about 8 feet tall. “There's your problem!”
“Okay...” Lilith followed the figure as it darted to another workspace across the room.
“Now now, no time to waste! I'm just too early that's all!” The figure pulled a lever, an intense stream of light emerged from the wall, a passage to the outside world, “Away with you now”. It directed Lilith to the passage, she resisted It's gentle push, turning to face It head on.
“No now wait, I'm sorry, but I'm not stupid” she stressed, “now... now please tell me what all this is”. The figure appeared taken aback, it could sense Lilith's worry.
“There will be time for questions soon enough Lilith, but for now I must ask you to leave” The figure raised It's voice, stern, yet at the same time nervous. Lilith stared It down, keeping cool control of the situation, she backed down in her aggressive tactics. She opened her mouth again to speak, yet her eyes were drawn to the screen. Her mouth remained open, shocked at what she saw.
“What is that?” she nervously voiced.
“A death certificate” It answered clinically.
“...Whose death certificate?” Lilith became more worried.
“Yours” The figure said this without even flinching, as if it were yet another “normal” part of their conversation. Lilith read what was written, at the bottom was a simple inscription reading “Car Accident”. Lilith broke down, she struggled to hold back the tears.
“Don't worry” The figure reassured, trying to remain upright, as if a reputation had to be upheld, It's resistance to her tears was thin, “it... it's going to be okay, I promise”.
The figure held out it's elongated, gentle hands. It brushed Lilith's cheek, drying off her tears.
“It will happen far from now... but you will be ready.” It smirked confidently, “You are special after all”
Lilith glanced up into the figure's inspiring eyes, they swirled with a deep blue not noticed by Lilith before, as if It's pupils were black holes and the colour a swirling galaxy. She gave It a thanking smile.
“Who are you?” she broke her silence, regaining her composure. The figure backed away, letting the light take hold of Lilith. She tried to resist but was dragged further into the immersive white. The figure faded into nothingness.
Lilith plunged into her handbag. She frantically moved all sorts of bits and pieces to get to the one that really mattered, her phone. She was already an hour late for an important meeting, one to decide the fate of the entire world's venture into the stars. She thought of what her boss would think, an image of him being disappointed at giving such an inexperienced twenty something year old such a massive job, but she was determined. She looked up, the street light across remained green. She glanced around to check for traffic, nothing still. All was safe, she began to venture across the road.
Suddenly she broke her stride. Her mind wouldn't allow her to continue. She fazed out from her obsession with the phone to notice a familiar pattern, it was the houses along the road, the street markings like signs, she had seen these before? She wasn't sure if it was from a dream or not, but she had seen them before! She quickly contemplated over her next move, to continue as normal, or listen to an obsessed mind. She decided... continue as normal. She took a step. She stopped. The sound of screeching filling her ears, a killing reflection blinding her. The bonnet of a car whizzing past her feet, her hair caught by the speed of the wind. She couldn't breathe. The car crashed into a telephone mast, sparks flying, the mast plummeted to the ground. Lilith had remembered why she paused... the one thing she could never forget, was forgotten. She wasn't quite sure how she had, but this wasn't the time to think about it. She ran to help the driver inside calling for help, clearly this was a lucky escape.
“Have you taken care of the suspect?” a voice croaked, it's inhuman echo lingered.
“Yes master...” a higher pitched voice replied, it's weasely tone irritating, “He is banished, he will never meddle with our plans again”
“Good, never again will that disappointment bathe in our sacred darkness” it chuckled with amusement.
“And our plan?”
“It goes ahead” it continued” “Soon. This planet will be ours... their souls given up for the taking... every, precious soul... all of them”
“Very good master” it's footsteps echoed as it walked away, it slid the door open revealing the screams of many thousands of souls, trapped. They again became quieter as the footsteps left the room. The door slid close silently.
Quick question also... what or who do you think the "figures" are? :wink5:
And thanks for taking the time to read! Constructive critisicm please, looking to get a view from the experts on how to improve each time.