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Little Gal
03-05-2012, 02:20 AM
Blue water and pink oily skin
Feeling through little yellow and brown beetles
Of mud and fairies of silken streams
That flow out,
directly to me from the landscape
It all is a single minute, of a thoughtless string
Of mind’s vacuum and the fragrance
Of lilies on my stove.
There are tiring roads of small white hours
running across my window
and I am still looking , for something...
so many times, wishing, for an underneath,
while the winds, still softly touch all the things,
uncovered,
my face will show-
what a sun looks like,
going down its own light...

Cotton178
03-05-2012, 03:37 AM
http://www.ipaddis.info/avatar4.jpgThe poem is very poetic!

Little Gal
03-05-2012, 10:02 AM
http://www.ipaddis.info/avatar4.jpgThe poem is very poetic!

:) thanks :)

Bar22do
03-05-2012, 03:25 PM
All this prompted by the fragrance of lilies! so beautiful!

It all is a single minute, of a thoughtless string
Of mind’s vacuum

and

It all is a single minute, of a thoughtless string
Of mind’s vacuum

are my preferred, as is the closing line....

Enjoyed it! Little Gal... :)

symphony
03-05-2012, 09:54 PM
"There are tiring roads of small white hours
running across my window
and I am still looking , for something..."

Just wonderful. Keep searching, keep writing.

Little Gal
03-08-2012, 12:33 PM
All this prompted by the fragrance of lilies! so beautiful!

It all is a single minute, of a thoughtless string
Of mind’s vacuum

and

It all is a single minute, of a thoughtless string
Of mind’s vacuum

are my preferred, as is the closing line....

Enjoyed it! Little Gal... :)

You always warm me up with your appreciation...
Thank you so very much!!
It feels really good... :)

Little Gal
03-08-2012, 12:34 PM
"There are tiring roads of small white hours
running across my window
and I am still looking , for something..."

Just wonderful. Keep searching, keep writing.

Tomar comment shobshomoy tei khub special...
Thank you dearie!

the facade
03-08-2012, 10:22 PM
Wow. This was really wonderful!

Little Gal
03-09-2012, 11:10 AM
Wow. This was really wonderful!

Thanks ... :)