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soloIQ
02-29-2012, 05:57 PM
Blow out your candles
knock on wood
here's your lucky socks
for Santa be good

Is your tooth under a pillow?
my horoscope looks great!
Bigfoot's been in our garden again
ask The Madam your fate

Aliens took Uncle Tommy
a ghost might be in your room
I found a 4 leaf clover!
a witch must have stole my broom

Never go under a ladder
and please don't step on a crack
here's a coin for the wishing well
your kitty might be too black

Eat your fortune cookies
my favorite monster was Lerch
put down the voodoo doll Sweety
it's time to go to Church

Buh4Bee
02-29-2012, 09:40 PM
this is a fun piece. gave me a chuckle.

BookBeauty
03-01-2012, 04:29 AM
This is a fun, satirical poem! Love it, especially how it ends with going to Church. Only thing that I might change is, ''a witch must of stole my broom'' to ''a witch must have stole my broom.'' Just a little nitpick, hope you don't mind. I appreciate you sharing your work. :)

Jerrybaldy
03-01-2012, 10:38 AM
This was a pleasure to read. Perfection from the title to the subject to the arrangement. Awash with memories of childhood rituals and beliefs and a killer end :) An absolute pleasure.

Jerrybaldy
03-02-2012, 09:04 PM
Bump. its worth it.

jennypaul
03-02-2012, 10:15 PM
its really nice...you can post some more...