Clumsy

[BookBeauty]

I tripped again,
And fell face-first
Into your disappointment.

I tried to wipe it,
Maybe clean it off with my sleeve
It fixed to me.

I'm really good at tripping.
It just happens,
And I can't take it back.

I hate having stuff
On my face
That doesn't belong.

[YesNo]

Nice way of putting what it is like to feel someone's disappointment: the accidental tripping that gets one dirty in such a way that one cannot get clean again.

[cacian]

Hehe..this is clever and funny.I am myself very clumsy.LOL
Intriguing too!!
Thank you BookBeauty!:smile5:

[cacian]

sorry double post.

[BookBeauty]

Thanks muchly, YesNo. I found it to be a pretty fun analogy. :D

*lol* cacian, speaking of being clumsy, with that double-post of yours. :P But, seriously, yeah, I have two left feet and two left hands. This poem makes fun of that, but it also makes fun of my tendency towards clumsy-impulsive speech. :P

[AuntShecky]

Yours truly is no stranger to tripping, both physically and mentally, so it's nice
to find a kindred spirit in your speaker. Ironically, this little verse is fairly graceful, except for the "stuck like glue" phrase. I'm sure you can come up with something original to replace it. But overall-- it's a keeper.

[Buh4Bee]

It's a cute little piece. I can relate well to this.

[BookBeauty]

Thanks, AuntShecky! I hadn't thought it graceful at the time. I was venting a bit. I suppose I'm a method-writer. :D I tried to change the 'stuck like glue'... I'm not sure if it's any better, and I may switch it back.

Very grateful that you enjoyed it, Buh4Bee. It's nice to know that we're all not alone in our clumsiness!

Perhaps some of the smart literary folk have to make up for their grace in the written word with clumsiness in mobility and speech. :P

[ShadowsCool]

Nice anology. I can feel it. I felt the same in love's little games.
Seems love takes more than it gives.

[prob]

As I already told, some time ago I started to study English because I wished to read my favorite authors in their own language. After a while I thought that a forum could be a good chance to improve my new skill.

I wondered what I could find in the wide world of English web. Yesterday I came across this forum and this verse was the first work I read.

“I’m lucky,” I said to myself at the end of reading.


(I am the last one who can judge the English expressions, but I found "stuck like glue" enough good to give a touch of... hem... corporality?)

[BookBeauty]

Thanks, ShadowsCool. And, in the end, the love you take is equal to the love you make. (Yay Beatles). :)

prob I am honoured by your reaction to my verse. It's not often that one can elicit such a response. I'm also humbled by it.