Reflection

[aliengirl]

Reflection

I asked the mirror, "Who am I?"
"Reflection", it replied.
"Of what", I asked,
highly perplexed,
"Oh, this and that,
you know."

"No, you cannot cheat.
So better be straight,
as straight as you can be."
"Look, I am so plane",
it yelled back at me,
"that plainer I can't be."

I sat up in bed,
very much outraged,
and pouted my lips,
then fluttered my lids
till it was forced to say,

"To others you are
what they perceive,
but with me you can be
a girl, a bird, or just a word,
whatever you want to be."

[Hawkman]

A nice Playful piece, Ripley and a good poem. Just one thing,

"I sat up on bed,"
There's a typo, on should be in, but otherwise, flawless.

Thanks for sharing.

Live and be well - H

[aliengirl]

Thank you Hawk! :) Corrective measure taken.

[Delta40]

And you spelled 'plain' wrong but otherwise, I enjoyed it very much AG.

[PrinceMyshkin]

I love the way the jaunty, spontaneous tone of this conceals (but not entirely) the serious questions underlying it, questions we all, surely, have asked ourselves.

[aliengirl]

And you spelled 'plain' wrong but otherwise, I enjoyed it very much AG.

No Delta, I mean it to be "plain".
Thanks for dropping by. :)

[aliengirl]

I love the way the jaunty, spontaneous tone of this conceals (but not entirely) the serious questions underlying it, questions we all, surely, have asked ourselves.

So did you get the (right) answer?
And thanks a lot dear Prince. :)

[Delta40]

No Delta, I mean it to be "plain".
Thanks for dropping by. :)

In S2 you wrote it as plane.

[WolfLarsen]

Nice poem.

[Haunted]

AG you might want to pick a different color, its hard to read and also not to conflict with Bar's signature blue.

A bit prosey for me I'm afraid, also some overwriting. You don't need very much outraged Show it, don't say it. You did just that in the next two lines, so I would lose that, it's redundant. Same principle applies to I asked, / highly perplexed. Again show it. Anyway I don't think you rally need it, it's implied and it only makes it read like a paragraph, not a stanza. The end comes together very nicely.

You might want to try a different technique. If you ital one of the speakers, you can lose the recurring phrases I ask" and "you reply" and the poem will be cleaner.

[cacian]

intriguing poem..
I am still working out this line

No, you cannot cheat.
So better be straight,
as straight as you can be."
"Look, I am so plane",
it yelled back at me,
"that plainer I can't be."

It feels like a dilemma and very much true self doubt and questioning.
I think the mirror concept used in this ' paradox' is cool.
Well done I enjoyed it aliengirl :smile5:

[Maximilianus]

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A poem loudly visual
By its graphics crystal clear.
A stabbing to the senses
By a rain of many a spear!

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[BookBeauty]

I think it says 'plane', because it's a mirror, but I'm not sure. The plainer bit I figure is saying that it can't be what it's not. It's plane, but can't be plain. Very punny, if that's the case. And I like puns.

But regardless of puns, I also like this poem. Thank you for your elegant words.

[aliengirl]

Thank you all. Just an attempt to write something funny and there is nothing better than 'pun' when you want to have a good laugh.

@ Delta - As BookBeauty has said I've used "plane" and "plain" in S2 as pun. (Sorry, I didn't want to explain because I thought it was clear.)

@ Wolf Larsen - Thank you. :)

@ Haunted - Thanks for your remarks. :) As I've said it is just a non-serious poem. But your comment gave me another idea. Maybe I can write another poem on the same theme in a serious tone.
Regarding the use of blue color - You may have noticed that I use the same color in my signature. I simply love this color on the PC screen. It's just a coincidence that Bar happens to use it too. (Also used by MystyrMystry.) I don't think it is a problem. I won't mind if all the entries are in blue font color.

@ Cacian - Glad you enjoyed it. :) Self-doubt? I like to call it introspection. Sounds a bit fancy. :p You know, the confused striving of some half-thought-out ideas, when you don't know what you want from yourself. :willy_nilly:

@ BookBeauy - Thanks a lot for your encouraging words. :)

[aliengirl]

http://smiles.kolobok.us/artists/just_cuz/JC_you_rock.gif

A poem loudly visual
By its graphics crystal clear.
A stabbing to the senses
By a rain of many a spear!

http://smiles.kolobok.us/personal/hi.gif


Thanks a lot for your little edifying poem. :smile5:

[Maximilianus]

Thanks a lot for your little edifying poem. :smile5:
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[Bar22do]

Late to this, but have fully enjoyed your poem, aliengirl, always happy to read you! You use the mirror image aptly and your playful tone veils some serious questioning. Well done. My very best to you, Bar

[aliengirl]

Thanks a lot for your kind warm words. :)

Best regards,
AG.

[tonywalt]

Excellent poem AG.

[aliengirl]

Thank you Tony. :)