Love Poem 59

[ShadowsCool]

Love Poem 59

Cheeks that form a whole,
My brush with eternity,
With teeth that form a pearl
Brush of beauty.

And raven reddish hair
Array your shoulder,
Like a golden rod splayed in sunlight
Waived from heavens air.

Every quiver of a blink
I wake in your stars,
Firing ringlets of rainbows
Radiant they are.

Your eyes casts stardust
Like a diamond casts fire,
As beautiful as the stars
Above a desert night







Love Poem 47

Moonlight was chafes of wheat that night,
There was a certain uniqueness in the air.
It was a downy hair that captured my eye.

So too your lulling voice,
With an amused look painted in your eyes,
Intent on mine.

As if you were seeing a phantom
In a cryptic sea,
Holding you spellbound
By looking at me

[Jerrybaldy]

Great romanticism. This reminds me that we do not know the sex of the writer and reading what you have written, does not help me, for this could have been written by either about either. That in itself is an achievement. Either would also love to have this written this for them. I would guess you are a Mr Cool. Nice job.

[ShadowsCool]

Jerry, thanks for taking the time to comment on my poems.

[cacian]

ShadowsCool I enjoyed poem 47 the most
These lines are captivating

Moonlight was chafes of wheat that night,
There was a certain uniqueness in the air.
It was a downy hair that captured my eye

As always I most enjoy reading your work.
Inspiring indeed:smile5:

[hallaig]

Love Poem 59

Cheeks that form a whole,
My brush with eternity,
With teeth that form a pearl
Brush of beauty.

And raven reddish hair
Array your shoulder,
Like a golden rod splayed in sunlight
Waived from heavens air.

Every quiver of a blink
I wake in your stars,
Firing ringlets of rainbows
Radiant they are.

Your eyes casts stardust
Like a diamond casts fire,
As beautiful as the stars
Above a desert night



Love Poem 47

Moonlight was chafes of wheat that night,
There was a certain uniqueness in the air.
It was a downy hair that captured my eye.

So too your lulling voice,
With an amused look painted in your eyes,
Intent on mine.

As if you were seeing a phantom
In a cryptic sea,
Holding you spellbound
By looking at me




Poem 1. Poor lass has got a lot to live up to here! Think the use of language like array, waived from heaven's air etc, too arch. Stop worshipping this woman wi cod verbosity.


Poem 2. See this is better, girl's got a bit of character, flesh and blood. Does things like speak and look at you! No sure about the last bit, is she supposed to look amused after seeing a phantom in that cryptic sea? And why's the amused look painted?

[BookBeauty]

I'm glad that I came to look back upon these verses. Such a nice flow. And I always love the personification of natural phenomenon. :)

[ShadowsCool]

Thank you to all for your comments.