Tear Colored Rocket

[Revolte]

If not for my first few greats
in art, love and work
I'd have little faith
in climbing these cliffs
from which I cowardly dove

and I'd build rockets from tears
that burn from the ashes
of a heart I once claimed
as warrior like and strong
but ripped as paper doves.

So they may take me far
away from here and earth
to distant rocks as blue
and vibrant as ours
(or as it is in lore)

so I may start anew
and fill the crimson gape
where my heart dangles,
drowned in pitiful envy
of those I hate for not loving me.

[ShadowsCool]

and I'd build rockets from tears
that burn from the ashes
of a heart I once claimed
as warrior like and strong
but ripped as paper doves.
me.

My favorite stanza. I really like this.

[BookBeauty]

Great use of metaphor and hyperbole. Lots of depth. :)

[Delta40]

This has to be one of my favourites of yours Revolte! Especially the second stanza - no actually, all of it! Pasting it to my favourites....

[firefangled]

I really like this stanza:




and I'd build rockets from tears
that burn from the ashes
of a heart I once claimed
as warrior like and strong
but ripped as paper doves.

[Jerrybaldy]

It felt as though it carried great weight but apart from the closing lines I am unsure what it contained, but I also felt that was probably my shortcoming not yours.

The line and part title ' Rockets from tears' is worth the entrance fee alone.

[Revolte]

Oh yay, thanks everyone :)