sincere

[cacian]

become yourself
undo your past,
nothing drags low
than words intense
over a less
that could have been
that never was.

listen to self
your voice inside,
it speaks the fines
about a you,
an inner you,

rewinds the plus
leave out the doubts,
nothing has much
sincere of taste,
then
self esteem
sailing it all,
above all fears
that could have been
that never were.

[ShadowsCool]

listen to self
your voice inside,
it speaks the fines
about a you,
an inner you,


A nice play with words. I like the way you set this up.
I especially liked the lines I copied.

Nice one cacian:thumbsup:

[Jerrybaldy]

It sure as hell felt sincere. Job done.

[Delta40]

I think this is poem reflects much better the title and captures what it is you want the reader to understand - to listen to our true voice.

one of your better poems cacian.

[cacian]

I think this is poem reflects much better the title and captures what it is you want the reader to understand - to listen to our true voice.

one of your better poems cacian.

Thank you Delta40 glad you liked this one:smile5:

[AuntShecky]

A tad abstract which could be alleviated with more concrete imagery actual
items that can be seen, heard, smelled, tasted, and felt (in a palpable way.)

It's hard to picture lines such as these:
nothing has much
sincere of taste

Is there a noun accidentally left off after the word, "sincere"? There's another AWOL after the word "less" in line 5.

Finally, while I don't doubt for a second your own self-proclaimed earnestness--an admirable quality in this duplicious day and age -- I wonder why it should appear in modern poetry. Please look up Stravinsky's famous quote about sincerity and bad art, and remember Shakespeare' paradox:

"The truest poetry is the most feigned."

[cacian]

Dear AuntShecky thank for reading and feedback.
I don't get the paradox
'the truest poetry is the most feigned'

whilst I do understand each and everyword in the paradox I do not get what it is trying to say.