I came across this

[cacian]

Baby shoes
For sale
Never worn



but this is my take on it!

baby shoes
brand new
not for sale

[Delta40]

What is it you are trying to smooth over Cacian?

[AuntShecky]

The quoted one I believe comes from Hemingway as an example of one of, if not "the" shortest short story ever written.

[cafolini]

Just the grammar is incorrect. No sale is a possible interpretation. But it's trivial.

[krymsonkyng]

Baby shoes
for sale
worn once.

[cacian]

Baby shoes
for sale
worn once.

Hey krymsonkyng this is a good one.;)

[Alexander III]

but this is my take on it!

baby shoes
brand new
not for sale

Your take kind off ruins it; it takes away all the beauty hemingway attached to those words.

[Charles Darnay]

:iagree::iagree: Hemingway demonstrates how great a story you can tel with such few words. The reliance on ambiguity is key.

[BLUE66Rose]

what are you tryhttp://www.rk-musics.info/avatar2.jpging to say?

[cacian]

Your take kind off ruins it; it takes away all the beauty hemingway attached to those words.

Alexander I take your point but where is the fun in not experimenting with language.
The whole point of literature is that it is up there for grabs.
I think if I started something a short book with 2pages and someone else came along and readapted their own motives I would be more then chuffed.
How is someone else suppose to think and change?
Isaw that Hemingway version I did not like it so I changed it the way I liked it.
This is perfectely natural thing to do.

[cacian]

what are you tryhttp://www.rk-musics.info/avatar2.jpging to say?

Who are you asking?

[cacian]

:iagree::iagree: Hemingway demonstrates how great a story you can tel with such few words. The reliance on ambiguity is key.

I saw the story and I did not think it was ambiguous but more indiscreet , insensitve and manipulative.
So I changed it.
A reader is more then just passive a reader can turnt the table around whenever they feel like it.
If read a book and I think it is offensive, insensitive and ignorant of other peoples' feelings I will take action and rewrite a new version.
I am entitled to it.

[cacian]

What is it you are trying to smooth over Cacian?

Hi Delta smoothing over? Me?L:p
Nah...I am only playing with and on words.

[Kingbob]

Ernest Hemingway was once prodded to compose a complete story in six words. His answer："For sale: baby shoes, never used."

[AuntShecky]

Ernest Hemingway was once prodded to compose a complete story in six words. His answer："For sale: baby shoes, never used."

See reply # 3^^^^

[cacian]

Ernest Hemingway was once prodded to compose a complete story in six words. His answer："For sale: baby shoes, never used."

Prodded? do you mean it was not his idea at the first place?