A Red Square on a Black Canvas

[WolfLarsen]

A Red Square on a Black Canvas
a poem by Wolf Larsen

Bleeeeeeeoooooorrrrp!!
, jiiii ? raaaa ! , llloooopppp!
! , ? , ////
Q ? Jrrrrrriiiiioooooovvvvveeee! , Blast ! Pong ! Gaaaaa!
Dup! - Daaaaa! - Ding ding!
Ding ding ding ding ding ding ding ding ding ding!
? ! ,
,,,///!!!!!!!....
Whoooooooppps
!!

Copyright 2012 by Wolf Larsen
Now playing: Neo-Grammatical-Errorism

[AuntShecky]

If you were to feature this one at a Poetry Reading, how would it sound?

[DieterM]

I really laughed out loud when reading your comment, AuntShecky. As to your poem, Wolf (I'd find it childish to dub it a "poem" rather than a poem), let me tell you that I'm not an advocate of the beautiful or the meaningful. Strange lines that don't seem to be connected can somehow do the job for me. The job being (I give you my personal opinion) to unchain something in me, to make me react, to feel something. Alas, your latest attempts (I haven't been digging the archives to find out more, I confess) don't do anything to me. They are vaguely annoying, the way TV ads can be: the latter are normally the signal for me to go into the kitchen and smoke a cigarette in order to do something "intelligent" with my time whist the nuisance floods the telly (here the "" are appropriate because, as you might argue, smoking is anything but intelligent). I'm truly fond of liberty of speech; I wouldn't want your poetry to be shunned from here and I will come back to read your offerings. But I'm not so sure I will comment as exhaustively as I did here. I somehow like your attitude. But attitude doesn't make art. Attitude alone doesn't transform some random signs into a poem. And (worst of all) attitude is neither suprising nor revolutionary (neither are grammatical errors, by the way; they are supplementary difficulties for and impolite toward those who are not native speakers; and I guess we are plenty in this forum).

[Sancho Panza]

Is there supposed to be some post-modernist meaning behind this meaningless stream of punctuation or did your head accidentally fall on the keyboard?

[WolfLarsen]

Ms. Shecky asked:


If you were to feature this one at a Poetry Reading, how would it sound?

I think it would be best if it is accompanied by music, spontaneous music played by either free jazz musicians or classical musicians specializing in 20th century sounds, I would have them play not too loudly, perhaps they could play Stockhausen, (especially if it is a traditionally-minded audience), but if it is a more advanced audience I would have 12 tone Schoenburg scale stuff, in addition, one can have visuals, such as images or paintings splashed across the walls by multiple film projectors, and I would have the poet naked while reading this, not in the erotic sense, (it is not an erotic poem), but in the honest and minimalist sense, perhaps all the better if the poet reading this is fat & ugly & old & naked, and the poet may at times scream the poem, at other times whisper the poem, and at other times sing the poem, and why not have random street noises?, and the tat-tat-tat of wars, and why not have modern dancers too moving around the poet?

[AuntShecky]

Well that would be one helluva spectacle, albeit costly in terms of dollars.

What I meant was: if you were to read this aloud, how would you pronounce these sounds:






Bleeeeeeeoooooorrrrp!!
, jiiii ? raaaa ! , llloooopppp!
! , ? , ////
Q ? Jrrrrrriiiiioooooovvvvveeee! ,



? ! ,
,,,///!!!!!!!....
!!

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

You know what's funny is that if Wolf was actually serious about his work, he could have made this more interesting by playing around with the font types/sizes/colors, especially since he suggests that a visual aspect would be necessary for a reading. But did he? No, he didn't. All he did was copy my (joking) idea of randomly hitting random punctuation keys on the keyboard.

People, he's duping you. Wake up!

[DieterM]

Mutatis, just FYI, I found Auntie's question really to the point; I don't think she's one to be duped, and I am neither. I posted what I thought in my comment above; got no answer at all (understandable answer, that is) and that will be it. I won't comment on any other poems like this one again. Wolf has a right to post random anything on here (doesn't harm ME, for one); I have the right to look at it, try to understand (once; won't overdo the process, mind you), think what I want to think (in this case, my personal opinion is somewhere between "has been done years ago, and much better, to top it off" and "plain crap") and then I have (and will take) the right to ignore this stuff. Best to you from Paris, btw.

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

Well, thanks Deiter. Paris is an amazing city.