Natural

[BookBeauty]

Everything,
Shimmers along
Casts rays,
Sways with shade

Half and full,
Sky and ground
Crescent and new,
Rise and fall

Sun and moon,
Me and you.

[aliengirl]

Wow! You have captured a magical moment here. Shimmering visual beauty of this poem is bewitching. Just one glitch in S2, the pair of words in each line are opposite except crescent and new. It somewhat disturbs the flow of thought.

[ShadowsCool]

The words play off each other very nicely. Isn't that what love is about. Two people merging their worlds? Nice little poem.

[Jerrybaldy]

beautifully poetic and concise.

[cacian]

Hey BookBeauty I love this piece.
I especially the middle stanza, I love the contrasts

Half and full,
Sky and ground
Crescent and new,
Rise and fall

simply clever.
Thank you for a lovely read.

[BookBeauty]

Thank you, aliengirl. Sadly, I couldn't bring myself to change the word, 'crescent'. I started to replace it with 'bow', and 'arc', and I just.. I couldn't! For some reason, it's decided to make its home, glitchily in my poem. But I do appreciate your insight immensely, and the kind words. =)

ShadowsCool: Thanks muchly! I tried my best to have the words playing with each other, dancing. =)

Jerrybaldy Many thanks! I seem to like to cut words out a lot, which leaves little room for the imagination. =) A strange poetic style that I have.

cacian Thanks so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it.