life is

[cacian]

life is a fruit
leaves
on a leaf
it comes and goes
just as it please
simply appeased.

life is a river
a water fall maze
that runs wilder
then bramble bees
rushing to greet
queen to a breeze.

pure is a splash
that tastes of lush
sweeter then dew
about to blush.

life is a scene.
answers to dreams
it's paradise
a colour of faith
a painting clip
just for your eyes.

life is what is,
a promise wrapped
in jewels of quartz
it gives you wings
then lets you
ride yourself
a smile.

life is a trip
mosaic style
graphic design
lighter then fast
life is all routes made up of moves
that takes you round heaven and earth.

[Delta40]

It seems to me Cacian that you have a colourful imagination. Alot of your poems have some great lines, vivid imagery but they are steered by rhyme instead of the free flow which they should have like the waterfall you mentioned here. I think if you can come up with lovely lines, its a shame to box them in as the rhyme factor in your poems is so obviously forced at times and I would suggest you let go of it and see what happens.

good luck!

[cacian]

Dear Della40 I thank you for reading and guidance.
I shall take your feedback and see if can let go of the rhyme factory...hehe..I do not think I realise.
Thank you.