Yes still Alive.

[zoolane]

The Silence.

Seamless mist that covers the sky with ghosts from the past.
Silence is briming itself within the battle.
The tanks are soaring ahead but with no sense of direction.
The bullets rush to their homes.

The soldier is shaken in his fox hole wanting to do his duty.
Praying to all gods in heaven or hell which ever the words floated to.
With stick in his hand and pressing the trigger.
Which will decide if the other will be alive or dead.

First time has a true soldier.
He will be now.

[Catamite]

I really enjoyed this. The lines are clean and simple, but effective in their descriptions. The whole scene is played out really well.
I guess the full stops were used for a particualr effect, but you don't really need them, and it would flow better wihtout them. I think the tanks shoud be soaring 'ahead' and that the 'covers' the sky. But other than this absolutely lovely...especially 'The bullets rush to their homes', such a great line!

[MystyrMystyry]

A war poem from Zoo! And pretty good!

I like:

The Soldier is shaken in his foxhole
wanting to do his duty

(I accidentally did the line break, though now I think it might work better ;) Up to you)

Well done Zoo!

[Delta40]

I thought:
Silence is briming itself within the battle
was a particularly powerful line

[zoolane]

Thank you all and for feedback.

[aliengirl]

Good to see you back Zoo! The first two lines are very evocative and these two from the second one

"The soldier is shaken in his fox hole wanting to do his duty.
Praying to all gods in heaven or hell which ever the words floated to."

are absolutely resonant of war times.

[Little Gal]

liked these lines very much..

" Seamless mist that covers the sky with ghosts from the past.
Silence is briming itself within the battle. "

very living a piece... :)

[zoolane]

Thank you