To Be...

[Little Gal]

The morning is putting its head out in the fog.
Pointing little fingers at it--
Everything is wrapped from the corners
And touched, and left, where they will not be found-
There is a single leaf as huge as a kingdom,
With no awareness of its veins gone here and there beyond margins
The stairs are all white and mopped spotless
And the loneliness, has begun to show in their clean faces.
If there was any light left in the clouds, and it was, for it shows now,
One could not know it would be so thick, and layered, and surface-less
The door would be often left just open, carelessness in wood and flesh
The still floor, and walls, and corners which have stories but no mouths.
Every breeze is folded into many small waves of happiness waiting, or gone
It is all behind now the living and the lane and nobody will know
Why everything will wait for sometime and go on-
While I go away.

[Buh4Bee]

I enjoyed the personification of morning. Very nice image! I enjoyed your last few poems. Thank you for posting!

[Little Gal]

Thank you for the encouragement... :)

[cacian]

Little Gal this is a great read.

Everything is wrapped from the corners
And touched, and left, where they will not be found-
There is a single leaf as huge as a kingdom,
With no awareness of its veins gone here and there beyond margins

I like these lines.
wonderful imageries. I enjoyed it:smile5:

[Little Gal]

Little Gal this is a great read.

Everything is wrapped from the corners
And touched, and left, where they will not be found-
There is a single leaf as huge as a kingdom,
With no awareness of its veins gone here and there beyond margins

I like these lines.
wonderful imageries. I enjoyed it:smile5:

I thank you with all my heart... :)

[Jerrybaldy]

There are lots of good lines and images here LG but some of the lines seemed disjointed from its neighbours. This may just be me of course...

You have some very individual ideas and thoughts... kingdom size leaves, stairs with faces and rooms with no mouths. Originality is hard to achieve in writing poetry and you definitely have your own style so keep on writing, good luck to you and I look forward to reading more of what you write.
JerryB

[Bar22do]

I'm impressed, Little Gal ("little wave"?) - this reads so authentic and the personification of the morning is a complex one alluding to N's very feeling...

"corners which have stories but no mouths"

is absolutely original and - a winner!

Thank you for unveiling a corner of your so rich an inner world, Little Gal,

Bar

[ShadowsCool]

Very excellent. Is that the right phrase?
Without being technical, I think you did a marvelous job!

"Every breeze is folded into many small waves of happiness waiting, or gone
It is all behind now the living and the lane and nobody will know
Why everything will wait for sometime...

I especially liked.

[Little Gal]

There are lots of good lines and images here LG but some of the lines seemed disjointed from its neighbours. This may just be me of course...

You have some very individual ideas and thoughts... kingdom size leaves, stairs with faces and rooms with no mouths. Originality is hard to achieve in writing poetry and you definitely have your own style so keep on writing, good luck to you and I look forward to reading more of what you write.
JerryB

:) I thank you...

[Little Gal]

I'm impressed, Little Gal ("little wave"?) - this reads so authentic and the personification of the morning is a complex one alluding to N's very feeling...

"corners which have stories but no mouths"

is absolutely original and - a winner!

Thank you for unveiling a corner of your so rich an inner world, Little Gal,

Bar

Little Gal is happy!
Thank you... :)

[Little Gal]

Very excellent. Is that the right phrase?
Without being technical, I think you did a marvelous job!

"Every breeze is folded into many small waves of happiness waiting, or gone
It is all behind now the living and the lane and nobody will know
Why everything will wait for sometime...

I especially liked.

It hardly matters if a phrase is right or not.. it just needs to mean right ...
Thanks a lot... :)

[Devilio]

You set the mood right from the first line and carry it forward with increasing beauty of unappreciated things. Kudos!

[Little Gal]

You set the mood right from the first line and carry it forward with increasing beauty of unappreciated things. Kudos!

thanks a lot, that was heart warming... :)