Summon

[odliam]

Warming away.
Standing in pride.
Smiling so wide.
Flowing it may.
Running in gray.
Forgetting along.
Singing a song.
All a nonsense.
Heavy and dense.
Straight and strong.

[cacian]

I like this poem.
short and to the point.
I love the changes in the visuals.
I enjoyed it!

[hillwalker]

It rhymes - but to me none of the individual lines make sense.

H

[odliam]

I like this poem.
short and to the point.
I love the changes in the visuals.
I enjoyed it!


Thank you, cacian!

You picked up the gist of it, your sentence "I love the changes in the visuals"
shows it!

Despite the easiness of the structure and the lightness of the words, I
reckon it is not a simple follow up, mixed cultural integration is not a mild
way to express poetry!

Have you some Erse background?

¬O.

[odliam]

It rhymes - but to me none of the individual lines make sense.

H

Thank you for your comment, hillwalker!

Yes, it rhymes, and if you look close you will find a somewhat strange
coupling of the rhyming lines for English language structure.

This little piece tries to honor the memory of an old feat brought to us as a
myth by a hero from Manx history, who, it is said, ousted Vikings from the
Irish Sea, in easiness, singing, and without nonsense.

Granted it may sound a little bit as a group of unconnected lines.

¬O.

[hillwalker]

Manx history - how do you expect readers to discover this from lines like

Smiling so wide - Flowing it may - Running in grey - Forgetting along - Singing a song?

It reads like jibberish if I'm honest with you and reveals nothing about mythology to my untrained eye. I'm obviously missing the point.

H

[cacian]

Thank you, cacian!

You picked up the gist of it, your sentence "I love the changes in the visuals"
shows it!

Despite the easiness of the structure and the lightness of the words, I
reckon it is not a simple follow up, mixed cultural integration is not a mild
way to express poetry!

Have you some Erse background?

¬O.


Have you some Erse background?
no this the first Ihave heard of him.
why do you ask?

[odliam]

Manx history - how do you expect readers to discover this from lines like

Smiling so wide - Flowing it may - Running in grey - Forgetting along - Singing a song?

It reads like jibberish if I'm honest with you and reveals nothing about mythology to my untrained eye. I'm obviously missing the point.

H

You are right, the idea is not to reveal the origin or tell a story but just make the eyes gleam.

I am not trying to parallel my writing, of course, but when you read Blake, or even Lord Tennyson the first time, it is possible you will find some not easy to understand lines.

What I tried to do is just to let the tongue, or thoughts, slide down into something easy and bonny.

I appreciate your opinion, being a new hand in the forum I must learn the ways!

Thank you!

¬O.

[odliam]

no this the first Ihave heard of him.
why do you ask?

For your quick perception of the hidden meanings in the loose sentences.

They depict a visual description of something, not saying what.

Thank you, it was a positive point in my not too good intent at easy rhyme.

¬O.