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inbetween
01-15-2012, 03:42 PM
here are four lines, that might, some day, become the firtst stanca of a poem...
what I hope to get from you all now are not suggestions as to how to continue this. to me writing anything like this, poems, short stories or producing anything that comes from me, is something very personal. I need to ponder upon such things.. let them boil inside until they come up.. it's a rather unconcious pocess and I would simply ignore any suggestions of your's.
but what I want to know is how it makes you feel, if you spontaniously associate anything with it, if pictures come up in your mind or anything like that.
so, please read and tell me how it makes you feel.
thx for sacreficing your time
so here they are:
I am the witch of now-and-then,
I'm dithering about,
Am either or, am neither nor,
And nowhere to be found.
ah, and if there are any spelling mistakes.. never mind.. that's not the point at stake at that state of the process. thx
PrinceMyshkin
01-15-2012, 09:46 PM
Essentially, it amuses me and puts me in a light-hearted frame of mind. I would liketo see more of it.
Buh4Bee
01-16-2012, 09:09 AM
I associate blackness to it.
Bar22do
01-16-2012, 09:19 AM
I'll find you!!!! :wink5:
Buh4Bee
01-16-2012, 03:48 PM
Watch out, she may find you instead, Bar.
inbetween
01-16-2012, 05:51 PM
thx for those comments,
exactly what I wanted
I'd like to have more
Delta40
01-16-2012, 07:07 PM
I'm impressed by the witch of now and then - casting me to endless timescapes. The other lines make no real impression on me.
hillwalker
01-16-2012, 07:48 PM
It's obviously a work in progress. Until you write something interesting there's not a lot I can say. You can't decide whether you're one thing or another - dithering - begging the question why do we need to know any of this?
You might have better spent your time doing some more pondering. As it stands it doesn't do anything for me personally.
H
inbetween
01-17-2012, 03:38 PM
just as well:smile5:
I'm brooding on it... there are more lines but those are the only ones I'm definite about, so far
and you're right, not beeing able to decide is something that keeps boiling within me.
I think it will be the essential part in this perhaps-to-be poem
so far we got blackness and in contrast to it something lighthearted, perhaps even teasing... thx for that
so far I've only been thinking of the blackness but ofcourse it's got those two sides... and I thinik I'll have it in a way that makes both sides possible to be seen in it..
thx
any other pictures or anything that comes to your mind when reading this?
give me more:biggrinjester:
hillwalker
01-17-2012, 04:39 PM
Stick with blackness - it's your subconscious telling you where to go next.
Don't ask others to intrude on your thoughts and suggest what to write next. You're the creator - write what your mind tells you to write because it will be more honest than anything anyone on here comes up with.
H
inbetween
01-20-2012, 01:14 PM
I won't...
I could not write what others suppose if it didn't feel right.. but when I look at the lines I got so far there's both in it.. and I think it's linked.... all this is describing a fact that can make you sad on one day and lighthearted on the other....
I promise, if not physicly (or in any other way) forced, I will never write anything that doesn't feel as if it was mine...
cafolini
01-20-2012, 01:21 PM
A digital power broom.
cacian
01-20-2012, 01:25 PM
I am the witch of now-and-then,
I'm dithering about
the problem with these two lines is that normally a witch is not known to dither so it kind drops or weakens the whole meaning of a witch.
Haunted
01-20-2012, 04:24 PM
It's not the witch that's dithering, it's the poem itself.
I don't get the witch thing...it could have been a housewife or a cat. In fact I got nothing out of reading this other than someone trying to write something but doesn't know what to say. If there's more to it, I'm afraid it's nowhere to be found.
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