I, As One Man

[Revolte]

I, as one man,
cannot perform the task of stability.
No, But I as one man
can perform execution
–Like the mightiest king of cobras,
one bite to another place.
Where tongues are not so forked
and hearts are not so dry.
I, as one man
can accomplish nothing,
but I, as one man,
can descend.

[Delta40]

I get the impression that one man can descend far easier than achieve greatness for the world. I may have read this wrong of course. Either way, I like the metaphor of the cobra, although I think there needs to be a review of the punctuation to give it a more smoother flow and increase its powerful end.

[Revolte]

noted. I thought the same at first but, stopped caring initially. I was coming down from a manic state and there was too much going on in my mind to be able to focus on that, plus I was in part of a stand off with coyotes at the time, I won, only because they gave up. The poem itself is of a dark demeanor, but I'll leave that for the reader, can't get into it right now it makes me sick.

[Alexander III]

I like it, sorry I can't offer more but I like it

[WolfLarsen]

I have to echo Alexander III's opinion. I like it. I just like it.

[cafolini]

I have to echo Alexander III's opinion. I like it. I just like it.

It is the function of the reader to cooperate with the writer without pretending better meaning than given. Editing has nothing to do with improving meaning other than the part that belongs to expressing it well. And even there it's a matter of taste. I liked it.

[WolfLarsen]

It is the function of the reader to cooperate with the writer without pretending better meaning than given. Editing has nothing to do with improving meaning other than the part that belongs to expressing it well. And even there it's a matter of taste. I liked it.

It is the function of the writer to whip and whip the reader into submission. The Writer is the god ofthe page. Let the reader assume the position and let the writer give it to the reader real good! Let the reader feel the writer blast all of his creative juices inside of him!