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MystyrMystyry
01-11-2012, 09:33 AM
beneath bluegum
by mercurial lake
sunlight ricochet
fractured refraction
surface craze
fractals reflecting
flicker evolving
splitting the rifts

leafy fat reefer
hazy purples
rod goes sproing
sight traces line
lost in glare
check the lock
bubbles and splash

screw cap hiss
cold beer swigs
peering across
blossom falls
feather froth
a tinkle plinks
ripples erupt

wefts and warps
as water weaves
blue eyes blink
liquid gleams
slice sliver
depths of silver
soft slither




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Delta40
01-11-2012, 08:06 PM
Mmm. I rather like how this poem falsely appears to be a change of letters or anagrams to make the next line while also showing a fishing theme

MystyrMystyry
01-17-2012, 05:22 PM
Thankyou Delta :)

Jerrybaldy
01-17-2012, 08:44 PM
Gone fishing with a joint and a beer. MM Style. Whats not to love? You took it into the poetic. Always a pleasure MM.

Helga
01-18-2012, 05:08 AM
I enjoyed this, the last few lines in particular

MystyrMystyry
01-18-2012, 05:23 PM
Thanks JB. And I was actually sitting under a bluegum by a lake. I'm thinking I should start doing it every weekend, and maybe so.

MystyrMystyry
01-18-2012, 05:24 PM
Thankyou very much Helga :)

Bar22do
01-19-2012, 07:07 AM
I read it a few times out loud and once my mouth trained (and lactic acid chased from the little muscles) - I found it sounds truly great! Plus I learnt some new fishy words!!! quite an experience, MM (I see there if life beyond the cave! ;) )

AuntShecky
01-19-2012, 03:15 PM
A veritable treat of sight and sound!

MystyrMystyry
01-19-2012, 03:32 PM
Thankyou Bar22do :)

MystyrMystyry
01-19-2012, 03:32 PM
Thankyou Aunty :)