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Dark Muse
12-29-2011, 02:18 AM
Porphyria Noir

A whisper of silk
upon flesh,
a touch like a feather,
tantalizing,
a subtle
promise.

The mystery
contained within,
only a glance,
veiled eyes,
a memory like
perfume which
never dies,
but lingers
effortlessly.

Yearning
for a caress
as soft as velvet,
to capture one of those
fluttering black birds
between your fingers
and inhale,
lips upon satin fingers.

She lives only
in dreams
beneath the glare
of flashing lights
reflecting in the rain,
but never forgotten
fingers trailing along
your thigh, their impression
everlasting.

It stirs the blood
now only ghost-like,
as her smile, cherry red,
the last moment you
saw her vanishing into
the oily black night.

At moments alone
you have it still,
a stolen token,
the touch of black silk
slithering across
naked skin.

hillwalker
12-29-2011, 06:48 AM
This oozes with erotic mystery - and I love the title.

But I wasn't sure about 'your thigh' in v4 or 'you have it still' in v6. The 'you' in question seems to have appeared from nowhere... and 'the touch of black skill' looks like a typo for 'silk' but I'm guessing not since 'silk' already appears in the first line.

H

Dark Muse
12-29-2011, 02:59 PM
This oozes with erotic mystery - and I love the title.

But I wasn't sure about 'your thigh' in v4 or 'you have it still' in v6. The 'you' in question seems to have appeared from nowhere... and 'the touch of black skill' looks like a typo for 'silk' but I'm guessing not since 'silk' already appears in the first line.

H

Yes it is meant to be silk, I had the intention of wanting the last lines to circle back to the beginning. It is a connection between the event and the memory and the erotic fixation with this woman's glove, even after she herself is long gone, he continued to relive the moment.

drakemortuare13
12-29-2011, 07:37 PM
Very well done. I can tell you've been at this for sometime now. I tip my hat to your skill.

Dark Muse
12-29-2011, 07:49 PM
Thank you!

Buh4Bee
12-29-2011, 11:22 PM
DM- Thank you posting this. Much enjoyed! Wish there was more posts as good as your poems. You consistently post decent poetry, not muddled stream of conscious blather.

Dark Muse
12-30-2011, 01:43 AM
DM- Thank you posting this. Much enjoyed! Wish there was more posts as good as your poems. You consistently post decent poetry, not muddled stream of conscious blather.

Thank you very much. I am particular about the poems which I post within the forum. While as you my notice within my blog I will tend to post some of my more "informal" personal/emotional poetry that is not necessarily as structured.