dashing

[cacian]

I see the fun
I hear it twirl,
the sound is rushed
around in loops,
it is magic
lifting the moon.

I see the fall
I hear it blue,
the cretes in bloom
appear serene,
the leaves are plumes
the scent is bliss,
it drizzles floss
of honey dew,
ahead,
a shore
waves at the moors,
scenic on seas
capture a rift
marhmallows dunes.

I see the feel
I hear the words,
a story glows
thousands of flows,
pages abreath
of scripted reves,
capture the realm
a mondaine plot,
that flickers hopes
in cryptic tones
wishing the world
a land of best.

[cafolini]

I loved it the way you use, invent and combine swiftly the words of your style. I took the liberty of editing a little believing in not changing your meanings. Hope that's so. The ending is beautiful.

I see the fun
I hear it twirl,
the sound is rushed
around in loops,
opportune magics
lifting the moon.

I see the fall
I hear it blow,
the Cretes in bloom
appear serene,
the leaves are plumes
the scents are bliss
drizzling the floss
of honey dews,
ahead
ashore,
waves on the moors
capture a rift,
scenic on seas
marhmallows dunes.

I see the feel
I hear the words,
a story glows
thousands of flows,
pages abreacting
of scripted reveries
capture the realm
of mundane plot
that flickers hopes
in cryptic tones
wishing the world
a land of best.

[cacian]

cafolini I thank you very much for your amasing imput.
your version reads much better.:seeya:
Thank you again!!